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what's your attitude about social contact websites

发布时间：2013-01-07 09:32:10 作者：夏俭发  发布者：xia813485512 浏览次数：3921  类别：英文作文  

  In our modern life the technology is very advanced .we could contact with others easier than 20 years ago .We could only use phone or write to contact with others in that time .But today we can contact with others on website .it's easier more fast and conveinece.But the opinion towards the social contact website that everybody has their own .

   Most of people think the social contact website is very good .it's make our life easier . they said that they needn't go out to make friends ,they could comunicate with ohers whenever they want ,and they could get the information that they want .So from it we can know that the most of people are support the social contact website .At least the social website have taken them beneficial .

   In my opinion there are advantages and disadvantages .the advantage is the same to the most people .Then  i will tell you the disadvantage . Because of the convient to contact . some of people have bad idsas to get money from those who like cotactting with unfamiliars .The bad people usually contact with others on net ,and comunicate with them and make others believe them .at last they ask for money from them .if he has gotten money from her.He would not cotact with she anymore .

   So even though social contact website could bring beneficial to us, but we should be careful whenever you are contactting with whom.And please make the most use of social contact websites.

• 批改教师：王思捷 ( 作文批改网 )
  批改时间：2013/1/7 11:43:59
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    In our modern life the technology is very advanced .we could （一般现在时态，用can）contact with others easier than ^{that in} 20 years ago .We could only use phone or write to contact with others in that time .But today we can contact with others on website .it's easier more fast （改为faster）and ^more conveinece.But the opinion towards the social contact website that everybody has their own ^ideas.

     Most of people think the social contact website is very good .it's makes our life easier . they said （一般现在时，用say）that they needn't go out to make friends , ^and they could （can）comunicate with ohers whenever they want ,and they could （can）get the information that they want .So from it we can know that the most of people are （后面为动词，去掉are）support the social contact website .At least the social website have taken them beneficial （从文章看用名词benefit）.

     In my opinion there are advantages and disadvantages .the advantage is the same to the most people （这话不合适）.Then  i will tell you the disadvantage . Because of the convient （用名词convience）to （of）contacting ^with. some of people have bad idsas to get money from those who like cotactting with unfamiliars （用strangers）.The bad people usually contact with others on net ,and comunicate with them and make others believe them .at last they ask for money from them （ask的用法：ask sb.for sth.）.if he has gotten （if条件句从句中不用完成时态，改为gets）money from her.He would （will）not cotact with she （her）anymore .

     So even though social contact website could （can）bring beneficial （benefits）to us, but we should be careful whenever you are contactting with whom.And please make the most （make good use of，意为“充分利用”）use of social contact websites.

  文章如果用汉语写出来是不错的，可惜......

• 批改教师：周绍芬 ( 山东省 >> 临沂市 >> 罗庄区 >> 黄山镇 >> 黄山镇英语备课组 )
  批改时间：2013/2/1 11:44:10
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  In our modern life the technology is very advanced .we could （一般现在时态，用can）contact with others easier than ^{that in} 20 years ago .We could only use phone or write to contact with others in that time .But today we can contact with others on website .it's easier more fast （改为faster）and ^more conveinece.But the opinion towards the social contact website that everybody has their own ^ideas.

     Most of people think the social contact website is very good .it's makes our life easier . they said （一般现在时，用say）that they needn't go out to make friends , ^and they could （can）comunicate with ohers whenever they want ,and they could （can）get the information that they want .So from it we can know that the most of people are （后面为动词，去掉are）support the social contact website .At least the social website have taken them beneficial （从文章看用名词benefit）.

     In my opinion there are advantages and disadvantages .the advantage is the same to the most people （这话不合适）.Then  i will tell you the disadvantage . Because of the convient （用名词convience）to （of）contacting ^with. some of people have bad idsas to get money from those who like cotactting with unfamiliars （用strangers）.The bad people usually contact with others on net ,and comunicate with them and make others believe them .at last they ask for money from them （ask的用法：ask sb.for sth.）.if he has gotten （if条件句从句中不用完成时态，改为gets）money from her.He would （will）not cotact with she （her）anymore .

     So even though social contact website could （can）bring beneficial （benefits）to us, but we should be careful whenever you are contactting with whom.And please make the most （make good use of，意为“充分利用”）use of social contact websites.

  点评：要养成检查的好习惯。

• 批改教师：李晨超 ( )
  批改时间：2013/2/9 19:47:54
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  In our modern life the technology is very advanced .we could （一般现在时态，用can）contact with others easier than ^{that in} 20 years ago .We could only use phone or write to contact with others in that time .But today we can contact with others on website .it's easier more fast （改为faster）and ^more conveinece.But the opinion towards the social contact website that everybody has their own ^ideas.

     Most of people think the social contact website is very good .it's makes our life easier . they said （一般现在时，用say）that they needn't go out to make friends , ^and they could （can）comunicate with ohers whenever they want ,and they could （can）get the information that they want .So from it we can know that the most of people are （后面为动词，去掉are）support the social contact website .At least the social website have taken them beneficial （从文章看用名词benefit）.

     In my opinion there are advantages and disadvantages .the advantage is the same to the most people （这话不合适）.Then  i will tell you the disadvantage . Because of the convient （用名词convience）to （of）contacting ^with. some of people have bad idsas to get money from those who like cotactting with unfamiliars （用strangers）.The bad people usually contact with others on net ,and comunicate with them and make others believe them .at last they ask for money from them （ask的用法：ask sb.for sth.）.if he has gotten （if条件句从句中不用完成时态，改为gets）money from her.He would （will）not cotact with she （her）anymore .

     So even though social contact website could （can）bring beneficial （benefits）to us, but we should be careful whenever you are contactting with whom.And please make the most （make good use of，意为“充分利用”）use of social contact websites.

  点评：多读，多悟，多写。相信你一定会有所收获。加油！