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My three new teachers

发布时间：2013-03-07 18:33:28 作者：刘晓慧  发布者：liuxiaohui 浏览次数：3454  类别：英文作文   优秀指数：★★

   I have three new teachers，a science teacher，an Chinese teacher and a music teacher.My science teacher is thin and tall，she’s very kind.My Chinese teacher is tall and thin，she’s quiet，she’s very kind and beautiful.She has big eyes.My music teacher is tall and strong.He’s strict，but he’s very kind.He has a big nose and small ears.

        I like them very much！

• 批改教师：郝文越 ( 山西省 >> 晋中市 >> 平遥县 >> 中都乡 >> 中都乡桥头小学 )
  批改时间：2013/3/7 18:58:02
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  I have three new teachers，a science teacher，an Chinese teacher and a music teacher.My science teacher is thin and tall，she’s very kind.My Chinese teacher is tall and thin，she’s quiet，she’s very kind and beautiful.She has big eyes.My music teacher is tall and strong.He’s strict，but he’s very kind.He has a big nose and small ears.

  I like them very much！

     点评：

     语法基本正确，句型丰富。继续积累，丰富表达！

    （ 注意英语开头不要空格，顶格写！）

• 批改教师：王思捷 ( 作文批改网 )
  批改时间：2013/3/7 22:12:23
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  I have three new teachers，a science teacher，an Chinese teacher and a music teacher.My science teacher is thin and tall，^and （两个句子并列用and）she’s very kind.My Chinese teacher is tall and thin，she’s quiet，she’s very kind and beautiful.She has big eyes.My music teacher is tall and strong.He’s strict，but he’s very kind.He has a big nose and small ears.

    I like them very much！

  点评：文章基本流畅，就是重复有点多。

• 批改教师：杜宝红 ( 山东省 >> 泰安市 >> 岱岳区 >> 泰山菁华双语学校 )
  批改时间：2013/3/8 16:20:38
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     I have three new teachers，a science teacher，an Chinese teacher and a music teacher ^{they are my science teacher,Chinese teacher and music teacher}. My science teacher is thin and tall，^and she’s very kind.My Chinese teacher is tall and thin  ^{looks like my science teacher}，^but she's quiet，she’s very kind and beautiful.She has big eyes.My music teacher is tall and strong.He’s strict ^{with me}，but he’s very kind.He has a big nose and small ears.

          I like them very much！