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This is my weekend

发布时间：2013-03-09 14:48:49 作者：陈永娟  发布者：chenyongjuan 浏览次数：3807  类别：英文作文   优秀指数：★★★★

    Hi!I'm a girl.My name is Chen Yongjuan. I'm 11. Now I am in Grade 5. Everyweekend, I go shopping at 9:00a.m. I visit grandparents at 11:00a.m. I do homework at 1:00p.m. I play sports at 4:00.What's your weekend? Can you tell me please?

• 批改教师：杜宝红 ( 山东省 >> 泰安市 >> 岱岳区 >> 泰山菁华双语学校 )
  批改时间：2013/3/9 19:42:35
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      Hi!I'm a girl.My name is Chen Yongjuan. I'm 11. Now I am in Grade 5. Everyweekend ^{Every weekend}, I ^often go shopping at 9:00 a.m. ,I visit grandparents at 11:00a.m. ,I do  ^my homework at 1:00p.m. I and play sports at 4:00.pm..What's your weekend? Can you ^please tell me ^{about it} please?

• 批改教师：郝文越 ( 山西省 >> 晋中市 >> 平遥县 >> 中都乡 >> 中都乡桥头小学 )
  批改时间：2013/3/10 7:07:49
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      能把书本所学知识和自己的生活联系起来，值得大家学习。可以让内容再丰富一些，具体谈一谈某个时间段的事情！

• 批改教师：王思捷 ( 作文批改网 )
  批改时间：2013/3/10 17:01:15
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      Hi!I'm a girl.My name is Chen Yongjuan. I'm 11. Now I am in Grade 5. Everyweekend, （中间加空格隔开）I go shopping at 9:00a.m. I visit grandparents at 11:00a.m. I do homework at 1:00p.m. I play sports at 4:00.What's your weekend? Can you tell me please?

  点评：还是这样，无关的话别写，少用“I+动词原形...”的句型，英语作文是要求变的。

• 批改教师：王天艳 ( 山东省 >> 临沂市 >> 罗庄区 >> 黄山镇 >> 黄山镇英语备课组 )
  批改时间：2013/3/14 20:05:00
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      Hi!I'm a girl.My name is Chen Yongjuan. I'm 11. Now I am in Grade 5. Every weekend, I go shopping at 9:00a.m. I visit grandparents at 11:00a.m. I do homework at 1:00p.m. I play sports at 4:00.What's your weekend? Can you tell me, please?

• 批改教师：冯琼英 ( 山东省 >> 临沂市 >> 罗庄区 >> 黄山镇 >> 黄山镇英语备课组 )
  批改时间：2013/3/16 13:37:08
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      Hi!I'm a girl.My name is Chen Yongjuan. I'm 11. Now I am in Grade 5. Everyweekend, I go shopping at 9:00a.m. I visit grandparents at 11:00a.m. I do homework at 1:00p.m. I play sports at 4:00.What's your weekend? Can you tell me please?

   

  点评：永娟的周末活动很详细，继续努力！