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scientific discover-curse or blessing
发布时间:2013-03-23 16:15:53 作者:周雪婷  发布者:110924110 浏览次数:4688  类别:英文作文  
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    With the scientific and technology highly develpoing .World has happened an earthshaking change,Everything has its two sides,for the scientific discoverment ,different people have different views.My point of view,scientifc discoverment both advantages and disadvantages.

    On the one hand ,the scientific discoverment has brought about great changes to human life.New electronic appliances have made our life simpler than ever before.New inventions helped us to organize our daily activities.For example,the telephone and internet were found , our life become more convenient and the transports make our life more quickly.

    On the other hands,the disadvantages about this discoverment shouldnot be negiented.Some of scientific inventions have been coused great harms or disease .For example,the PM2.5,the environment is more terrible.By using internet ,it is much easier to cheat than before such as searching the answers of homework.

    To sum yp ,we must be alert against the possible harm while enjoying the benefits from the scientific discoverment.

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        With the scientificscience)and technology highly develpoing .World has happened an earthshaking change,(earthshaking change has happened,因为earthshaking已经有了“震惊世界”的含义)Everything has its two sides,for (including)the scientific discoverment ,different people have different views.My point of view,scientifc discoverment (inventions,没有discoverment这个单词,从文章看,谈的是“科学发明”而不是“发现”has both advantages and disadvantages.

        On the one hand ,the scientific discovermentinvention)has brought about great changes to human's life.New electronic appliances have made our life simpler than ever before.New inventions helped us to organize our daily activities.For example,the telephone and internet were(have been) found (invented), our life become more convenient and the transports make our life more quickly.

        On the other hands,the disadvantages about this discoverment (invention)should not be negiented.(overlooked,忽略)Some of scientific inventions have been coused great harmsdisasters)or disease .For example,the PM2.5,the environment is more terrible.By using internet ,it is much easier to cheat than before such as searching the answers of (to)homework.

        To sum yp ,we must be alert against the possible harm while enjoying the benefits from (of)the scientific discoverment.(invention)

    备注:因为事物繁忙,你的作文没有及时批改,请谅解。

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