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海蒂

发布时间：2013-04-20 17:59:52 作者：南泓羽  发布者：nhy2000625726 浏览次数：2561  类别：中文作文  

                               海蒂                                          南泓羽 临沂第二十中学                                                    

                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                 海海蒂，                                                                                                   一一个活泼可爱的女孩                                                                                               一一个天真阳光的女孩，                                                                                                                          她，用自己微不足道的爱。                                                                                让让彼得的奶奶心里充满阳光                                                                                                                                       帮帮助克拉拉战胜疾病                                                                                                                                                                                                              让让贪玩厌学的彼得学会了认字                                                                                                                                                                          安安抚失去女儿的医生                                                                                       看啊，                                                                                                                                                     海海蒂用她那温暖的心情                                                                                              用用她那阳光的笑脸                                                                                           用用她那真诚和善良                                                                                                                                                                       完完成了一见又一件不可思议的事情                                                                                 她她热爱生活                                                                                           喜喜欢坐在一望无际的牧场上                                                                                     享享受着那缕阳光                                                                                                                                                      她她热爱大自然                                                                                                               喜喜欢在一望无际的牧场上                                                                                                                                                                                  嗅嗅着那大自然的气息                                                                                                                 她她喜欢的还有很多很多……                                                                                                                                    当当她被蒂提姨妈带走时                                                                                                     海海蒂是多么迷茫                                                                                                                                                          爷爷爷是多么伤心                                                                                                                           又又有谁体会的到呢                                                                                                                                                                                     静静静闭上眼睛                                                                                                     回回想海蒂在阿尔卑斯山脚的时光                                                                                                                     那那时是多么开心                                                                                                                                                                            想海蒂在赛斯曼家的时候                                                                                   那那时是多么无助                                                                                            海海蒂用她的爱                                                                                            感感化了身边的所有人                                                                                 我相信吧                                                                                            她她的爱不仅会在阿尔卑斯山脚下蔓延                                                                                        也也会在我们每个人的心中蔓延               

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                                 海蒂                                          南泓羽 临沂第二十中学                                                    

                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                   海海蒂，                                                                                                   一一个活泼可爱的女孩                                                                                               一一个天真阳光的女孩，                                                                                                                          她，用自己微不足道的爱。                                                                                让让彼得的奶奶心里充满阳光                                                                                                                                       帮帮助克拉拉战胜疾病                                                                                                                                                                                                              让让贪玩厌学的彼得学会了认字                                                                                                                                                                          安安抚失去女儿的医生                                                                                       看啊，                                                                                                                                                     海海蒂用她那温暖的心情                                                                                              用用她那阳光的笑脸                                                                                           用用她那真诚和善良                                                                                                                                                                       完完成了一见又一件不可思议的事情                                                                                 她她热爱生活                                                                                           喜喜欢坐在一望无际的牧场上                                                                                     享享受着那缕阳光                                                                                                                                                      她她热爱大自然                                                                                                               喜喜欢在一望无际的牧场上                                                                                                                                                                                  嗅嗅着那大自然的气息                                                                                                                 她她喜欢的还有很多很多……                                                                                                                                    当当她被蒂提姨妈带走时                                                                                                     海海蒂是多么迷茫                                                                                                                                                          爷爷爷是多么伤心                                                                                                                           又又有谁体会的到呢                                                                                                                                                                                     静静静闭上眼睛                                                                                                     回回想海蒂在阿尔卑斯山脚的时光                                                                                                                     那那时是多么开心                                                                                                                                                                            想海蒂在赛斯曼家的时候                                                                                   那那时是多么无助                                                                                            海海蒂用她的爱                                                                                            感感化了身边的所有人                                                                                 我相信吧                                                                                            她她的爱不仅会在阿尔卑斯山脚下蔓延                                                                                        也也会在我们每个人的心中蔓延      

   

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