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My family

发布时间：2013-05-06 19:29:22 作者：王唯  发布者：974968306 浏览次数：3291  类别：英文作文   优秀指数：★★★★★★

There are five people in my family.They are my father，my mother，my sister，my brotherand I.My father is a worker.He likes listening to music.He goes to work by motorcycle.My father is strict with me.My mother is a farmer.She likes dancing.My sister is a student.She likes drawing.My brother is a baby.He likes playing.Iam a student,too.I like reading books.

My father is taller than my mother.My mother is taller than me.Iam taller than my sister.My sister is taller than my brother.My father is heavier than me.My sister is thinner than my mother.My hair is longer than my father`s.My mother`s eyes are bigger than mine.

I love my family.

 

• 批改教师：王思捷 ( 作文批改网 )
  批改时间：2013/5/6 19:56:53
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  点评：纠正两个语言错误，“...and I”,不是me,还有“严厉的”英语单词是strict。文章语言上的错误不多，这点很好，但是以同一种句式写下去是否有些单调？

• 批改教师：郝文越 ( 山西省 >> 晋中市 >> 平遥县 >> 中都乡 >> 中都乡桥头小学 )
  批改时间：2013/5/6 19:59:19
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  点评：

  比较级运用多次，但好像没有更多的意义，为了运用而运用，能不能写点有趣的？

• 批改教师：冯琼英 ( 山东省 >> 临沂市 >> 罗庄区 >> 黄山镇 >> 黄山镇英语备课组 )
  批改时间：2013/5/6 22:42:42
  点评指数：★★★
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  There are five people in my family.They are my father，my mother，my sister，my brotherand me.My father is a worker.He likes listening to music.He goes to work by motorcycle.My father is strickt with me.My mother is a farmer.She likes dancing.My sister is a student.She likes drawing.My brother is a baby.He likes playing.Iam a student,too.I like reading books.

  My father is taller than my mother.My mother is taller than me.Iam taller than my sister.My sister is taller than my brother.My father is heavier than me.My sister is thinner than my mother.My hair is longer than my father`s.My mother`s eyes are bigger than mine.

  I love my family.

  点评：王唯同学能够运用不同的句式介绍自己的家人，值得表扬，加油！

• 批改教师：王天艳 ( 山东省 >> 临沂市 >> 罗庄区 >> 黄山镇 >> 黄山镇英语备课组 )
  批改时间：2013/5/7 18:18:55
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  There are five people in my family.They are my father，my mother，my sister，my brotherand me.My father is a worker.He likes listening to music.He goes to work by motorcycle.My father is strickt strict with me.My mother is a farmer.She likes dancing.My sister is a student.She likes drawing.My brother is a baby.He likes playing.Iam a student,too.I like reading books.

  My father is taller than my mother.My mother is taller than me.Iam taller than my sister.My sister is taller than my brother.My father is heavier than me.My sister is thinner than my mother.My hair is longer than my father`s.My mother`s eyes are bigger than mine.

  I love my family.