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My Family

发布时间：2013-05-16 20:10:52 作者： 王相容  发布者：P110711206 浏览次数：3128  类别：英文作文  

   My family is a warm unit.there are four peopel in my family.they are my father,my mother,my brother and me.my father is a worker,he is new work in Guangzhou.He likes reading and lstening to old songs.my mother is very kind and hardwork.She many year in housework and agricultural work.I love my parents.My brother is a student.He want to be a sporsman,he think it is cool.He like play basketball.I am a college student.I like eating and have a sweet sleep.Sometime,I will climb mountain with friends .On Staurday and Sunday,I often go tothe library and do a part-time job to earn a little living expenses.Sometimes,we watch TV and listen to music at home.

  Awarm family teacth my honesty,goodness.I feel I'm a happiness girl,because live in the awarm family.I love my parents,love my brother.love my family very much.I hope my family will be happy forever.

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     My family is a warm unit.there are four peopel^e in my family.they are my father,my mother,my brother and me(I).my father is a worker,^now he is new work^s in Guangzhou.He likes reading and lstening(listening) to old songs.my mother is very kind and hardwork^ing.She many year in(has done) housework and agricultural work(farming for many years).I love my parents.My brother is a student.He want to be a(an) sporsman(athlete),he think it is cool.He like^s play^ing basketball.I am a college student.I like eating and have a sweet sleep.Sometime^s,I will climb mountain with friends .On Staurday and Sunday(at weekends),I often go to the library and do a part-time job to earn a little living expenses.Sometimes,we watch TV and listen to music at home.

    A warm family teacth^es my(me) honesty ^and goodness.I feel I'm a happiness(happy) girl,because ^I live in the a warm family.I love my parents,love my brother ^and love my family very much.I hope my family will be happy forever.

  Perhaps you are happy.But checking this composition,I felt a little unhappy.