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My holiday plan
发布时间:2013-05-23 19:12:54 作者:陈晓楠  发布者:chenxiaonan 浏览次数:7483  类别:英文作文   优秀指数:★★★★★★★
[小学六年级] 山东省 >> 临沂市 >> 罗庄区 >> 黄山镇 >> 黄山镇中心小学


   My summer holiday is coming soon. I am very happy.And I made my plan yesterday. Now , let me tell you.
   On Monday,I am going to do my homework. On Tuesday ,I am going to learn to sing songs because I love music very much. On Wednesday,I am going to clean my room and play computer games. On Thursday,I am going to read books.On  Friday,I am going to play sports.

   This is my summer holiday plan.

 

 

 

 

教师点评:
  • 批改教师:周绍芬 ( 山东省 >> 临沂市 >> 罗庄区 >> 黄山镇 >> 黄山镇英语备课组 )
    批改时间:2013/5/23 19:42:53
    点评指数:★★★
    点评内容:

       My summer holiday is coming soon. I am very happy.And I made my plan yesterday. (时态的运用准确自如)Now , let me tell you.
       On Monday,I am going to do my homework. On Tuesday ,I am going to learn to sing songs(,) because I love music very much. On Wednesday,I am going to clean my room and play computer games. On Thursday,I am going to read books.On Friday,I am going to play sports. 

       This is my summer holiday plan.

     

         晓楠写得很不错哟!有计划的孩子我最欣赏了!除了向你学习外,老师给你两点建议:一、暑假计划的日期最好具体到几月几日。读完你的作文,是不是有点像一周的计划?二、注意单词和段落之间的间距。Good job! Come on!

     

     

     

     

  • 批改教师:李晨超 ( )
    批改时间:2013/5/24 12:29:26
    点评指数:★★★
    点评内容:

       My summer holiday is coming soon. I am very happy.And I made my plan yesterday. Now , let me tell you.
       On Monday,I am going to do my homework. On Tuesday ,I am going to learn to sing songs because I love music very much. On Wednesday,I am going to clean my room and play computer games. On Thursday,I am going to read books.On  Friday,I am going to play sports.

       This is my summer holiday plan.

    Tips:晓楠同学做的计划真不错,劳逸结合。如果能翻翻日历,写上具体时间就更好了。暑假没有想去的地方吗?打算怎么去?和谁一起去?去干什么?心情怎么样?如果能给假期旅行做个计划,那就更好了。加油!希望看到你的假期旅行计划。

     

     

     

  • 批改教师:王思捷 ( 作文批改网 )
    批改时间:2013/5/24 13:59:46
    点评指数:
    点评内容:

       My summer holiday is coming soon. I am very happy.And I made my plan yesterday. Now , let me tell you.
       On Monday,I am going to do my homework. On Tuesday ,I am going to learn to singing songs because I love music very much. On Wednesday,I am going to clean my room and play computer games. On Thursday,I am going to read books.On  Friday,I am going to play sports.

       This is my summer holiday plan.

     

     

     

     

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