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My children's day

发布时间：2013-05-28 19:38:15 作者：杜雨桐  发布者：2264888735 浏览次数：2896  类别：英文作文  

My Children‘s day was very lively.My friend were came to my home and play whit me.I were very.My mother made a big cake to me.I like it very much .It was delicious.After ate cake，I go to the zoo whit my good friend-----Betty.It was a good day.

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  My Children‘s day was very lively.My friend were came to my home and play^ed whit (with)me.I were very ^happy.My mother made a big cake to (for)me.I like it very much .It was delicious.After ate(eating) cake，I go (went)to the zoo whit (with)my good friend-----Betty.It was a good day.

  点评：1.动词的一般过去时态前不用be.

             2.make sth. for sb.为某人做某物。

             3.介词后用动词的ing形式。