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My holiday(四次作文）

发布时间：2013-06-07 18:39:53 作者：王俐  发布者：1394771346 浏览次数：3209  类别：英文作文   优秀指数：★★

   It was a long holiday. We left Linyi on May 1st and got to Jinan on the 2nd .On the first day ,I went to a park with my family. On the 3rd ,I went skiing with my sister and my brother. On the 4th, I did my homework.On the 5th,I bought presents for my uncle. We got back to Linyi by plane on the 6th.For the last day of the holiday,we relaxed and prerared to go back to work or school.I was so happy!

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     It was a long holiday. We left Linyi on May 1st and got to Jinan on the 2nd. On the first day,I went to a park with my family. On the 3rd ,I went skiing with my sister and my brother. On the 4th, I did my homework.On the 5th,I bought presents for my uncle. We got back to Linyi by plane on the 6th.For the last day of the holiday,we relaxed and prerared to go back to work or school.I was so happy.

  点评：能够反复去修改一篇文章，很欣赏你这点，继续努力，老师期待着阅读你更多的英语文章。

      这一次老师再跟你探讨一个英语中的知识点：并列连词的用法，你现在比较熟悉的并列连词有and，but，or等。

      并列连词就是“一座桥”，起到连接作用，而且连接的东西必须是同类同量的，通俗的说，前面如果是“半斤书”，后面连接的也必须是“半斤书”，不能变成“八两书”，或者“半斤猪肉”。也就是说，前面是名词，连接的后面必须是名词（像文中 my sister and my brother），前面是doing后面必须是doing （例如：She is singing and dancing.,这里就不可以说singing and to dance，singing and book等），前面是一个句子，后面必须也接一个句子（像你文中We left Linyi on May 1st and got to Jinan on the 2nd.这就是and连接了两个句子，后面主语因为跟前面主语一样，都是we，所以省略了）等等。

       具体到文中we relaxed and prerared to go back to work or school.这句中有两个并列连词and和or（往往用在否定和疑问句中）。and在本句中连接的是连接的两个动词，relaxed and prepared（都是动词，都用的过去式，很对）。or前后连接的应该是to do不定式（to go back to work跟 to go back to school）。如果并列连词连接的是to do不定式时，后面的to可以省略，一般不会把动词省略掉。这里可能认为是go back to相同，所以给省略了。这样让这个句子读起来有点别扭，因为or前面是work（工作），而后面是school（学校-学习的场所），前后好像不太一致。如果把school改成study的话，这样就好一些了。上一次给修改为了图省事，就把并连连词or给删掉了~