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My day

发布时间：2013-06-08 21:25:12 作者：乔俊萱  发布者：836928437 浏览次数：3238  类别：英文作文   优秀指数：★★★★

              My day

  My day is very fun.I usually get up at 6：30 in the morning.I usually eat breakfst at 7:00.I usually go to school at 7:30.I usually eat lunch at 11:20.I usually eat dinner at 7:00.This is my day.what about you day?

 

 

• 批改教师：王思捷 ( 作文批改网 )
  批改时间：2013/6/8 22:26:39
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                My day

    My day is very fun.I usually get up at 6：30 in the morning.I usually eat breakfst at 7:00.I usually go to school at 7:30.I usually eat lunch at 11:20.I usually eat dinner at 7:00.This is my day.what about you?

  eat和have的区别是前者指“吃”的具体动作，后者指“吃”的笼统状态，一般“吃饭”用have。

• 批改教师：陈伟 ( 山东省 >> 烟台市 >> 烟台工贸技师学院 )
  批改时间：2013/6/9 18:31:27
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                My day

    My day is very fun. I usually get up at 6：30 in the morning.I usually eat^have  breakfst (breakfast) at 7:00.I usually go to school at 7:30.I usually  eat^have  lunch at 11:20.I usually  eat^have dinner at 7:00.This is my day.^{It is great fun!} what about you?

  点评：作者能把自己的一天的生活简明清晰的表达出来，不错，继续努力！

  另外老师关于My day 这篇文章再说两句：

  1. have， eat， take都可以当“吃”讲，但它们之间略有差别：

  ①have作“吃”解时多用于“吃饭”,如have breakfast(吃早饭),have lunch(吃午饭),have supper(吃晚饭),have dinner(吃正餐),have a meal(吃一顿饭)。

  ②eat作“吃”解,多用于吃水果、鱼、肉等, 如：eat an apple(吃苹果),eat an orange(吃桔子),eat some meat(吃肉)。

  ③take作“吃”解,多用于吃药。如: take some medicine 吃点药

  2.在写这种文章时最好用上一些表示时间逻辑的副词，像：after（在……以后），then（然后），next（接下来）等等。

• 批改教师：冯琼英 ( 山东省 >> 临沂市 >> 罗庄区 >> 黄山镇 >> 黄山镇英语备课组 )
  批改时间：2013/6/10 14:17:45
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                My day

    My day is very fun.I usually get up at 6：30 in the morning.I usually eat breakfst at 7:00.I usually go to school at 7:30.I usually eat lunch at 11:20.I usually eat dinner at 7:00.This is my day.what about you?

  点评：俊萱同学的一天生活很有规律啊，多写一些英语小短文，提高书写水平。最后一句可改为：What about your day？