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发布时间:2013-08-17 13:57:51 作者:张德  发布者:1844585657 浏览次数:1768  类别:英文作文   优秀指数:
[初中三年级] 浙江省 >> 温州市 >> 瓯海区 >> 郭溪镇


Tom is very happy who find a new job.And he think that this holiday will be very beautiful and relaxing.  It is a sunny and hot day.goes to the beach with his friends who are get on well with he and have a good time.There are many people on vacation here.Some are swimming is the sea,others are taking a walk.Look!This goup of people are cool who are playing beach volleyball.What a interesting day!

Are we supposed to do DIY?We have talked about this question.Here are the results of the reaults of the studeng think that doing it yourself is good for themselves,it can not show your style,but can help you havecapacity. a good time.On the one hand,it will improves our capacity.On the other hand,we will save my money.Every coin has two sides.The other half of students think doing it yourself is bad which will spend time and money.And have some dangerous.What is more,it is easy for us to ask somebody else to do it.

As we know,nowaday,going abroading is more and more popular in our daily lift.Students qo abroad can not open their eyes,but can get some good expersive.Every coin has two sides,some people who think that going abroad will spent too much money in studing.What is more,some students is too young to take care of them.Everyone has different opinion,Ithink that going abroad is good for our life,and we will get some experience。

Daniel is my friends who is helpful,kind and creative.He comes from Beijing Sunshine Secondary Sshool and he is a hard-work students.He told me that when he grow up,he want to be a computer programmer,so he very likes surf on the Internet.Although sports is good for his health,he do not like play sports.But he is a good boy who ofter help the older cross the road,and he works at the Helping Hands Club.He also is a creative boy,nowaday,he creates a TV programmer.What a great boy!So Iwant to be a person like Daniel from now on and get along with everyone.

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  • 批改教师:陈伟 ( 山东省 >> 烟台市 >> 烟台工贸技师学院 )
    批改时间:2013/8/18 20:13:38
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    Tom is very happy who finds a new job.And he thinks that this holiday will be very beautiful and relaxing.  It is a sunny and hot day. He goes to the beach with his friends who are get on well with he him and  they have a good time.There are many people on vacation here there.Some are swimming is in the sea, while others are taking a walk. Look! This goup of people are cool who are playing beach volleyball are quite energetic .What a an interesting day!

    Are we supposed to do DIY? We have talked about this question There is a widesprad concern over this topic in recent days.Here are the results views of the reaults of the studeng some students:They  think that doing it yourself is good for themselves, it which can not only show your style, but can help you have capacity to be a person of abilitya good time.On the one hand, it will improves our capacity. On the other hand, we will can save my some money.Every coin has two sides.The other half of students think doing it yourself is bad,  which will spend would waste any time and money.And , and it also has have some dangerous.What is more, it is easy for us to ask somebody else to instead of us to do it.

    As we know, nowadays, going abroading is more and more popular in our daily lift life .Students qo going abroad can not only open  their eyes, but can get they can gain some good expersive.Every coin has two sides, some people,of course, hold different ideas, who think that going abroad will could spent too much money in studing.What is more,some students is too young to take care of themselves .Everyone has different opinion,I think that In my opinion, going abroad is good for our life,and we will  can get some experience. Daniel is my friends who is helpful, kind and creative.He comes from Beijing Sunshine Secondary Sshool and he is a hard-working students.He once told me that when he grow up, he want to be a computer programmer, so he very likes surfing on the Internet.Although sports is good for his health, he do not like playing  sports.But he is a good boy who ofter help the older cross the road, and he even  works at the Helping Hands Club.He is also is a creative boy, nowaday, he who creates a TV programmer recently .What a great boy! So I want to be a person like Daniel from now on and get along with everyone.  点评:四篇文章,有写人(第四篇),有记事(第一篇),还有两篇观点对比性的英语文章(第二三篇)。在写作过程,基本能够把握住相关作文的结构及其内容,不过要注意文章中存在的一些细小的知识点的错误。

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