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Lastweekend
发布时间:2013-08-29 09:18:03 作者:孟晨  发布者:mengchen 浏览次数:2142  类别:英文作文   优秀指数:★★
[小学六年级] 山东省 >> 临沂市 >> 罗庄区 >> 黄山镇 >> 黄山镇中心小学


OnSaturdaymorning,Iwashedmyclothes.Iwenttoapark.
Intheafternoon,Ididmyhomework.Iwentfishing.
Intheevening,IwatchedTV.
Onsundaymorning,Icleanedmyroom.
Intheafternoon,Ivisitedmygrandparents.
Intheevening,Iplayedfootball.
Thatwasabusyweekend.
教师点评:
  • 批改教师:王思捷 ( 作文批改网 )
    批改时间:2013/8/29 13:15:55
    点评指数:
    点评内容:

    On Saturday morning,I was hed my clothes.I went to a park.


    In the afternoon,I did my homework.I went fishing.


    In the evening,I watched TV.


    On sunday morning,I cleaned my room.


    In the afternoon,I visited my grandparents.


    In the evening,I played football.


    That was a busy weekend.

    写的是不错,但英语词与词之间要空出大约一个字母的空格的。

  • 批改教师:陈伟 ( 山东省 >> 烟台市 >> 烟台工贸技师学院 )
    批改时间:2013/8/30 22:51:22
    点评指数:★★
    点评内容:
    On Saturday morning, I washed my clothes.I went to a park.
    In the afternoon,I did my homework.I went fishing.
    In the evening,I watched TV.
    On sunday morning,I cleaned my room.
    In the afternoon,I visited my grandparents.
    In the evening,I played football.
    That was a busy weekend. 点评:孟晨同学经过简短的几句话,将自己的繁忙(busy)的周末描述了出来、在具体的语言点上,孟晨同学对介词in,on表示时间的用法掌握比较好。“在早上、下午、晚上”用in,如in the morning/afternoon/evening,具体到某一天的早上下午晚上时要用介词on,如:On Saturday morning
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