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When Socrates Meets Confucius
发布时间:2013-09-09 17:13:10 作者:冯乐  发布者:2010041501002 浏览次数:6222  类别:英文作文  
[大学四年级] 辽宁省 >> 沈阳市 >> 皇姑区 >> 三台子街道


When Socrates Meets Confucius

Distinguished judges, ladies and gentlemen, good morning.

People say we youth are the happiest. But belive it or not, we are not, we are actually annoyed by the study staff. Whats worse, we students are invariably got blamed for it by the parents or the teachers. But the blame may not be due so much to ourselves as to Socrates and Confucius as the modern education way is so deeply influenced by the two famous teachers.

Socrates and Confucius, the two famous saint teachers both taught through dialogues as the main way of teaching. The dialogues between Socrates and his students is in the form of  teachers constantly asking and students following thinking and answering. while the later form is  students asking and teachers answering. Thus, the Socrates students shaped the habit of critical thinking, so did the later western students. And the Confuciuss students could remember and recite a lot of the taught knowledge, so did we Chinese students. 

The problem, also the reason why we students annoyed is the backwards of their teaching methods because the nowadays teaching methods are dated back to theirs. The Socratic way are only most suited for those who are good at debating. While the debating is hard to come to results, the students learn less knowledge. And with Socrates constantly serious asking and almost no praise, the students were often so depressed. In this point, the students of Confucius are luckier. Confucius gave courages whenever the students behaved well and taught students according to their aptitude. However, we Chinese students know that we are so painful to remember and recite so much textbooks knowledge. And the society feels so pity about the Chinese students machine-like minds-- we dot not think much and habitually waiting for answers. 

  

This summer vocation, I tutored a student in the secondary school. Like most Chinese children, the student shaped the bad of waiting for answers and not thinking actively. I remember in one class, I asked him three questions relative to the taught knowledge, he hook his head straight away and said I dont know. I then kept asking the fourth question, What equals one plus one? I dont know, he answered immediately. After a short silence of embarrassment, we both laughed and he said it equals two. See, in most cases, we know the answer if we think. After that time, I forced him not to say I dont know in my class and instead saying Let me think  whenever he wants to say I dont know. It worked well, he then often forced himself to think like this and he got great progress.

   

The Confucius way of teaching deprived our critical thinking ability and left us countless textbooks to remember; while the Socratic way of teaching made us depressed and in high pressure when we are not good at debating.

So when Socrates meets Confucius, we do hope that they could talk about their teaching methods and learn from each other. Actually, why not we arranging their meeting by combining the advantages of their teaching method-- to learn happily and to think critically.

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     Distinguished judges, ladies and gentlemen, good morning.

     

    People say we youth are the happiest. But actually  belive it or not, we are not, we are actually always annoyed by the study staff. Whats worse, we even  students are invariably got blamed invariably for it by the our prents or the teachers. But the blame may should due so much to ourselves as but  to Socrates   and Confuciusas the modern education way is so deeply influenced by the two famous teachers.

     

    Socrates and Confucius, the two famous saint teachersboth taught through dialogues as the main way of teaching. The dialogues between Socrates and his students is  are  in the form of teachers constantly asking and students following thinking and answering. while the later form is students asking and teachers answering. Thus, the Socrates students shaped the habit of critical thinking, so did the later western students. And the Confuciuss students could remember and recite a lot of the taught  learned  knowledge, so did we Chinese students.

     

    The problem, also the reason why we students annoyed is the backwards of their teaching methods because the nowadays teaching methods are dated dates back to (date from跟date back to  不能用于被动语态)theirs. The Socratic way are is only most suited suiteful  for those who are good at debating. While the debating is hard to come to results, the students learn less knowledge. And with Socrates constantly serious asking and almost no praise, the students were often so depressed. In this point, the students of Confucius are luckier. Confucius gave courages whenever the students behaved well and taught students according to their own  aptitude. However, we Chinese students know that we are so painful to remember and recite so much textbooks knowledge. And the society feels so pity about the Chinese students machine-like minds-- we dot not think much and habitually waiting for answers.

     

    This summer vocation, I tutored a student in the secondary school. Like most Chinese children, the student shaped the bad habit of waiting for answers and did  not thinking actively. I remember in one class, I asked him three questions relative to the taught learned kowledge, he hook shook his head straight away and said I dont know. Then I    then    kept asking the fourth question, What equals is one plus one? (或者what does one plus one equal?) I dont know, he answered immediately. After a short silence of embarrassment, we both laughed and he said it equals two. See, That is,    in most cases, we know the answer if we think. After that time, I forced him not to say I dont know in my class and instead ofsaying Let me think whenever he wants to say I dont know. It worked well, he then often forced himself to think like this and he got makegreat progress.

      

    The Confucius way of teaching depriveds our critical thinking ability and left leaves  us countless textbooks to remember; while the Socratic way of teaching made makesus depressed and in high pressure when we are not good at debating.

    So when Socrates meets Confucius, we do hope that they could talk about their teaching methods and learn from each other. Actually, why not we arranging their meeting by combining the advantages of their teaching method-- to learn happily and to think critically.(?)点评:2013“外研社”全国英语演讲大赛题目就是When Socrates Meets Confucius,关于这个题目可以选择以下角度去写:①描述their perspective in teaching,也就是描写the advantages and disadvantages between Chinese Education and Western Education;② 还可以涉及到their views on life and ethics and so on;③当然还可以从一角度写:regarding the two giants as the bridge of communication between the east and the west(跟globalization联系起来)。   关于本文来说,还需要在内容和结构上认真修改,祝好运!

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