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The most important event in my life
发布时间:2013-09-11 19:29:51 作者:贾爱丽  发布者:jal20120351017 浏览次数:3806  类别:英文作文  
[大学二年级] 云南省 >> 昆明市 >> 盘龙区


   More and more student are doing part-time job today,and I hope myself could become the person like them.I am excited since after finished high school education,because I have more time that belong to myself.I can do everything If I want,so I decided to find my first paid job.

   I got a card about part time job from classmates,and I heard that things are succeed in doing work.I went to interview.In fact,the interview just arrived someplace to get information,and turn to another way.Finally,I managed to find a way to the company.I was told they needn't any one todo the job,and they have somebody to finish it.I was upset.How terrible this thing is,I can't stand. But,I decided to call telephone,and asked the reason.A girl told me she would find the situation.After about five minutes,she said that thanks to me refuse the job.But,I didn't.What hapened.What should I do? Is me wrong?I can't bblieve it.Why let me come,why I can't got the job?They said have people to do it.I returned to school,many students konw the thing,they said the same thing also happen to them,I got it,the card just is a card,many dad guys are cheat.

   Now,I don't want to do the part-time job,the only thing is knowledge.I believe that no pain,no gain.If we learn more we can get more thing,including money. 

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       More and more student are doing part-time job today,and I hope myself (I)could become the (a)person like them.I am excited since after finished (finishing)high school education,because I have more time that belongs to myself(me).I can do everything If I want to,so I decided to find my first paid job.

       I got a card about part time job from classmates,and I heard that things are succeed in doing work(hardworking).I went to interview.In fact,the interview (the emoplyers) just arrived someplace to get information,and turn to another way.Finally,I managed to find a way to entering the company.I was told they needn't anyone todo the job,and they have somebody else to finish it.I was upset.How terrible this thing is,(was)I can't (couldn't)stand it. But,I decided to call telephone,and asked the reason.A girl told me she would find the situation.After about five minutes,she said that thanks to me refuse the job.But,I didn't.What hapened.What should I do? Is (Was)me (I)wrong?I can't bblieve (coudn't believe)it.Why let me come,why I can't (coudn't)got (get)the job?They said they had have (had)people to do (done)it.I returned to school,many students konw (had known)the thing,they said the same thing also happened to (on)them,I got it,the card just is a card,many dad guys are cheat.

       Now,I don't want to do the part-time job,the only thing is knowledge.I believe that no pain,no gain.If we learn more we can get more thing,including money. 

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