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University Is Necessary
发布时间:2013-09-22 16:59:55 作者:董登科  发布者:19931221ddk 浏览次数:1916  类别:英文作文  
[大学二年级] 湖北省 >> 武汉市 >> 武昌区 >> 珞珈山街道


University is the place where most of us want to go.But we all know that it is impossible for all of us to go to the university if it is absolutely futile.As is known to us all,a large part of persons who are very successful are those who went through the university so that a lot of people approve that it is necessivery as I did. In my opinion,to go to university is a key matter in our lives .

In the story,the reason why the dauther is not allowed to go to the university maybe is that her family can't pay for it.Because in current society,everyone knoows the importance to go to college.University has positive action on cultivating its students.So in my opinion ,as long as the father know a little advantages ,he will send his dauther to the college.We can learn many aspects of knowledge in the university to be a useful citizen.

After we enter the university,what the college may teach us is to render us know how to acquire and process and apply the knowledge and how to adjust ourselves in the society.But as we all know,these abilities are necessities for us to live in college and society.So there is no doubt that these abilities are quite important.Learning in university can teach us take advantage of science to make our life better.What's more,it is college that teach us to learn freedom and democracy.

 

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    University is the place where most of us want to go.But we all know that it is not impossible for all of us to go to the university if it is absolutely futile(unfutile).As it is known to us all,a large part of persons who are very successful are those who went through the university life so that a lot of people approve that it is (it is approved that going to the university is )necessivery (necessary)as I did. In my opinion,to go (going)to university is a key matter in our lives .

    In the story,the reason why the dauther (daughter)is not allowed to go to the university maybe (perhaps)is that her family can't pay for (afford)it.Because (though)in current society,everyone knoows (knows)the importance to go to college.University has positive action on cultivating its students.So in my opinion ,as long as the father know a little advantages ,he will (should)send his dauther (daguhter)to the college.We can learn many aspects of knowledge in the university to be a useful citizen.

    After we enter the university,what the college may teach us is to render us know how to acquire and process and apply the knowledge and how to adjust ourselves in the society.But as we all know,these abilities are necessities (essential)for us to live (master)in college and society.So there is no doubt that these abilities are quite important.Learning in university can teach us to take advantage of science to make (,making)our life (lives)better.What's more,it is college that teach us to learn freedom and democracy.

    文章词语句法不很准确,略显啰嗦。

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