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英语作文二篇

发布时间：2013-09-22 20:49:47 作者：颜廷毅  发布者：qfyty 浏览次数：3487  类别：英文作文   优秀指数：★★

假如你是Gina，昨天（星期二）得了重感冒，头痛、发烧。妈妈带你去医院，医生给你开了些药，让你多喝水，并建议你在家休息两天。现在请给你的老师Mr. Zhang 写一第不少于60词的请假条。

 

Dear Mr. Zhang,

I had a bad cold yesterday with headache and fever, my mom took me to the hospital, the doctor gave me some medicine and let me drink much more water. He also told me that I should stay at home for 2 days. So I can’t go to school until the day after tomorrow. Don’t worry about me, I’ll learn by myself at home.

 

Yours,

Gina

每个人都有自己的理想和追求，你的理想是什么呢？你想怎样实现你的理想呢？请把你的想法写出来。不少于60词。

My dream is going to be a reporter. If I become a reporter, I’ll be able to talk with many interesting people. I’ll even have a pet parrots. On holidays, I think I am going to Hong Kong for vacation. So now, I’m going to work harder for my dream. I believe that my dream will come true.

• 批改教师：陈伟 ( 山东省 >> 烟台市 >> 烟台工贸技师学院 )
  批改时间：2013/9/29 20:12:27
  点评指数：★★
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  假如你是Gina，昨天（星期二）得了重感冒，头痛、发烧。妈妈带你去医院，医生给你开了些药，让你多喝水，并建议你在家休息两天。现在请给你的老师Mr. Zhang 写一第不少于60词的请假条。

   

  Dear Mr. Zhang,

  I had a bad cold yesterday with headache and fever, my mom took me to the hospital, the doctor gave me some medicine and let me drink much more water. He also told me that I should stay at home for 2 days. So I can’t go to school until the day after tomorrow. Don’t worry about me, I’ll learn by myself at home.

   

  Yours,

  Gina

  (点评：格式准确，语言表述准确流畅，是篇非常不错的初中生作文，继续努力！)

  每个人都有自己的理想和追求，你的理想是什么呢？你想怎样实现你的理想呢？请把你的想法写出来。不少于60词。

  My dream is going to be a reporter. If I become a reporter, I’ll be able to talk with many interesting people. I’ll even have a pet parrots. On holidays, I think I am going to Hong Kong for vacation. So ^But  now, I’m going to work harder for my ^thedream. I believe that my dream will come true.

  （点评：从两篇文章中，很好的体现出颜廷毅同学良好的英语水平，继续努力，定能取得更好的成绩。）