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The rules in my family

发布时间：2013-11-05 23:05:44 作者：颜廷毅  发布者：qfyty 浏览次数：4922  类别：英文作文   优秀指数：★★★★

作文要求：俗话说家有家规，在家里，父母一定给你写下了不少的规矩吧。请根据提示先描述这些规矩，然后就这些规矩发表你的看法，并提出你的建议。80个单词左右。

1.    can’t go out on school nights; 2. have to go to bed before 9 o’clock;  3. be not allowed to play computer games.

 

The rules in my family

My parents are very strict to me. So there are many rules in my family: Fist of all, I can't to out on school nights. My father thinks I should study during the whole evening. Second, I have to go to bed before 9 o'clock. Of course, I'm not allowed to stay up watch TV. Third, I'm not allowed to play computer games. My mother says that I had better pay more attention to my homework. I'm really tired. I don't like these rules at all. I think children should be allowed to have their own time to do something they want. Like playing computer games, reading books……

• 批改教师：王思捷 ( 作文批改网 )
  批改时间：2013/11/8 21:12:11
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  作文要求：俗话说家有家规，在家里，父母一定给你写下了不少的规矩吧。请根据提示先描述这些规矩，然后就这些规矩发表你的看法，并提出你的建议。80个单词左右。

  1.    can’t go out on school nights; 2. have to go to bed before 9 o’clock;  3. be not allowed to play computer games.

   

  The rules in my family

  My parents are very strict to me. So there are many rules in my family: Fist of all, I can't to (go)out on school nights. My father thinks I should study during the whole evening. Second, I have to go to bed before 9 o'clock. Of course, I'm not allowed to stay up ^to watch TV. Third, I'm not allowed to play computer games. My mother says that I had better pay more attention to (on)my homework. I'm really tired. I don't like these rules at all. I think children should be allowed to have their own time to do something they want. Like playing computer games, reading books……

• 批改教师：杜宝红 ( 山东省 >> 泰安市 >> 岱岳区 >> 泰山菁华双语学校 )
  批改时间：2014/1/15 18:32:27
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  作文要求：俗话说家有家规，在家里，父母一定给你写下了不少的规矩吧。请根据提示先描述这些规矩，然后就这些规矩发表你的看法，并提出你的建议。80个单词左右。

  1. can’t go out on school nights; 2. have to go to bed before 9 o’clock; 3. be not allowed to play computer games.

  The rules in my family

  My parents are very strict to ^with me. So there are many rules in my family: Fist ^first of all, I can't to ^go out on school nights. My father thinks I should study during the whole evening. Second, I have to go to bed before 9 o'clock. Of course, I'm not allowed to stay up watch ^watching TV. Third, I'm not allowed to play computer games. My mother says that I had better pay more attention to my homework. I'm really tired. I don't like these rules at all. I think children should be allowed to have their own time to do something they want. Like playing computer games, reading books……

  
  

   pay  attention to doing sth.注意做某事