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My view on Water Crisis

发布时间：2013-12-15 13:22:22 作者：2  发布者：1850157272@qq.com 浏览次数：3729  类别：英文作文  

At present ,there are an increasing number of people are aware of the importance of fresh water,because of the big problem, which is the shortage of fresh water.Different people hold on the different points. As far as my concerned ,the problem,I think ,is not only caused by one factor, there are also many factors, there are several reasons that are the important reasons  to explain the problem .,Reasons are below .

   The first and the important reason is dirty water and trash  from daily life and industries .with the development of economy and society ,although people can get the good quality of goods and varieties of service ,people and industries made much dirty water and trash every days ,in the end ,the pollution result from this reason ,so as to make the water pollution to reduce a great deal of fresh water,finally the problem of the shortage of fresh water arises.

   The further important reason is that the  great change of climate .as we all konwn ,that the precipitation deficit cause the shortage of fresh water,Dry place is very dry, causing drought,so the hot potato of the shortage of fresh water is more   serious ,people are worried about water ,with time goes by ,natural water becomes less ,let alone  the fresh water. it increases the  shortage of fresh water.

Last but not the least,I think that people are  wasting water is so an important reason to support my opinion .because of it ,causing the shortage of fresh water directely ,so it is necessary for us  ,I believe ,to save the source of water .

Taking account of those factors ,my point is supported ,so I can conclude that there are many factors result in the shortage of fresh water, so I want to repeal people  to ,save our water source ,otherwise ,we  will at the cost of environment .

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  At present ,there are an increasing number of people are aware of the importance of fresh water,because of the big problem, which is the shortage of fresh water.Different people hold on the different points. As far as my concerned ,the problem,I think ,is not only caused by one factor, there are also many factors, there are several reasons that are the important reasons  to explain the problem .,Reasons are below .

     The first and the important reason is dirty water and trash  from daily life and industries .with the development of economy and society ,although people can get the good quality of goods and varieties of service ,people and industries made much dirty water and trash every days ,in the end ,the pollution result from this reason ,so as to make the water pollution to reduce a great deal of fresh water,finally the problem of the shortage of fresh water arises.

     The further important reason is that the  great change of climate .as we all konwn ,that the precipitation deficit cause the shortage of fresh water,Dry place is very dry, causing drought,so the hot potato of the shortage of fresh water is more   serious ,people are worried about water ,with time goes by ,natural water becomes less ,let alone  the fresh water. it increases the  shortage of fresh water.

  Last but not the least,I think that people are  wasting water is so an important reason to support my opinion .because of it ,causing the shortage of fresh water directely ,so it is necessary for us  ,I believe ,to save the source of water .

  Taking account of those factors ,my point is supported ,so I can conclude that there are many factors result in the shortage of fresh water, so I want to repeal people  to ,save our water source ,otherwise ,we  will at the cost of environment .