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Saving Land for Endangered Animals

发布时间：2014-05-08 08:17:04 作者：张洋  发布者：19930107 浏览次数：3065  类别：中文作文  

   In this picture,we can see that a giraffe feel sad because it lives in a small zoo and it hopes that  people  can saving land for  them.We can also see a lots of buildings behind the small zoo.In my opinion,we should saving land for endangered animals because they are our friends and I can tell you more  reasons  as follows:
    First, mankind‘s need for land is constantly growing. If the demand is not checked in some way, humans will eventually develop all of the earth‘s available land. At that time, mankind will have no more room to grow, and all the wild animals will have disappeared, as well as other valuable resources. Second, humans are able to innovate and can use the land that they already possess in more efficient ways. Animals are unable to do this. Once their land is taken away from them they will die. Third and last, endangered animals are an important part of the biodiversity of our planet. If they disappear, we cannot predict what the effect will be. Therefore, we should treat such animals as a valuable resource to be protected.
     To sum up, the world‘s endangered animals are an important resource and we should protect them by setting aside some land for them. Although mankind‘s need for land continues to grow, people are intelligent and inventive enough to put the land they have to better use. In this way, we can have enough land for farming, housing and industry, and preserve the biodiversity of the planet at the same time.I think we should treat them as our best friends and our world will be colourful if we can do it.

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     In this picture,we can see that a giraffe feel sad because it lives in a small zoo and it hopes that  people  can saving (save) land for  them.We can also see a lots of buildings ^lying behind the small zoo.In my opinion,we should saving (save) land for (protecting) endangered (endangers) animals because (and) they are our friends and I can tell you more  reasons  as follows:
  First, mankind‘s need for land is constantly growing. If the demand is not checked in some way, humans will eventually develop all of the earth‘s available land. At that time, mankind will have no more room to grow, and all the wild animals will have disappeared, as well as other valuable resources. Second, humans are able to innovate and can use the land that they already possess in more efficient ways. Animals are unable to do this. Once their land is taken away from them they will die. Third and last, endangered animals are an important part of the biodiversity of our planet. If they disappear, we cannot predict what the effect will be. Therefore, we should treat such animals as a valuable resource to be protected.
  To sum up, the world‘s endangered animals are an important resource and we should protect them by setting aside some land for them. Although mankind‘s need for land continues to grow, people are intelligent and inventive enough to put the land they have to better use. In this way, we can have enough land for farming, housing and industry, and preserve the biodiversity of the planet at the same time.I think we should treat them as our best friends and our world will be colourful if we can do it.