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How Has Internet Changed My Life

发布时间：2014-05-13 23:39:34 作者：liuhuilin  发布者：huilin123 浏览次数：5166  类别：英文作文  

Internet came into my life in 2004,when I was ten.After that,my life has been changed a lot.

    At first,it changed my life in entertainments.I used to play games with my friends in our yard.We jumping,singing and chasing to keep fit and making for fun.However,when we were attracted by Internet,laughing from the yard no more exist.I use our computes to play games,watch TV and so on.

    Then,Internet broaden my eyes in oceanic message or knowledge.I can search information and get the material what teachers asked us to find and even find jobs in the internet.What's more,there is a words described by Chinese'If  you have any questions,please find Baidu for help.'Through that searching engine or website,you can know whatever you want to understand.

    Most importantly,internet has changed my way of communications.In the past,I could find a pen pal from foreign countries.

    While just because of the convenient communication and entertainment from the internet.I stay up late,exercise less and keep in touch with friends in real life less and so on.

    Thus, internet changes my life in both harm and good.But I believe that it dose more good than harm.So I still pleased with those changes brought by the internet.

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  Internet came into my life in 2004,when I was ten.After that,my life has been changed a lot.

  At first,it changed my life in entertainments^{.In our yard,my friends and} I used to play games with my friends in our yard.We jumping,singing and chasing to keep fit and making for fun.However,when we were attracted by Internet,laughing from the yard no more exist.I use our computes (computers) to play games,watch TV and so on.

  Then,Internet broadens my eyes (view) in oceanic (mass) message or knowledge.I can search information and get the material what teachers asked us to find and even find jobs in the internet.What's more,there is a words described by Chinese'If  you have any questions,please find Baidu for help.'Through that searching engine or website,you can know whatever you want to understand.

  Most importantly,internet has changed my (the) way of communications (I communicate).In the past,I could find a pen pal from foreign countries.

  While just because of the convenient communication and entertainment from the internet.I stay up late,exercise less and keep in touch with friends in real life less and so on.

  Thus, internet changes my life in both harm and good.But I believe that it dose more good than harm.So I still pleased with those changes brought by the internet.