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Set sail
发布时间:2014-05-19 23:46:27 作者:张池  发布者:huashuicici 浏览次数:3181  类别:英文作文  
[大学一年级] 河南省 >> 郑州市 >> 金水区 >> 龙子湖街道祭城路


       Seting sail began, are you ready or not? In fact, it deserves to be ready, but you always don't do that.

Though you  do not like it, you need to be confidence in yourself and your family. Do you ever remember that you promised to someone that you would set up a good example for them? Do not forgot it.

      Therefore, it is you that cause this result today. You can not blame anyone but you have to accept it. You always stick to do something in the past. Now, you should not try but failed what you often do it, and you should have done something that you always want to give it up because of the difficulties. Meanwhile, you would remember which dream is the most important part of your life. you can be reminded that "Dreams are one of those things that keep you going and happy". Dreams are your nature power, and you need to be patient for yourself which you are trust and responsible on the position.

      However, you should know that "Sucess comes from accumulation day by day". The key to achieving your dream is to take action not just thinking, dreaming and it is action and thinking that would produce great influence.  

     If you want to voyage for far place, the first step you need to be ready to set sail. And the most important step is that making a good plan and strengthen your conviction. So when you are in the process of arriving the destination you will find that the scenery is so beautiful and it will encourage you to go on hard-working and achieve a beautiful life. Seting sail and seting out to make a difference.

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    Setting sail was being began, are you ready or not? In fact, it had been (deserves to be) ready, just (but) you always not set sail (don't do that).


    bility to (Be confidence in) yourself and your family. Look back, do you ever remember that you promised to someone who (that) you would set up a good example for them? But you (Do not) forgot it.

    Therefore, it is you who (that) cause this result today. You can not blame anyone that you (but) have to accept it. You always stick to do something in the past. Now, you should not have done something (do) that (what) you often do it, and you should have done something (try) that (what) you always want to give it up (try but failed) because of the difficulties. Meanwhile, you would remember which dreams are (is) the most important to a part of your life. you can think (be remindedthat "Dreams are one of those things that keep you going and happy". Dreams are your nature power and you need to be a patient for yourself which you are trust and responsible on the position.

    However, you should know that "The only place where your dream becomes impossible is in your own thinking". (Sucess comes from accumulation day by day). The key to achieveing your dream is to takeing action not just stay thinking, dreaming and it is action match (and thinking) together that would produce great influence. It is an important part of your life .

    When (If) you want to voyage for far place, the first step you need to be ready to set sail. And the most important step is that has (making) a good plan and strengthen one's (your) conviction. So when you are in the process of  arriveing the destination which you will find that the scenery is so beautiful and it will encourage you to go on hard-working on your dream and achieve a beautiful life. Setting sail and setting out we could (to) make a difference.

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