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What we can not afford to lose

发布时间：2012-09-16 12:45:19 作者：王升权  发布者：348860349 浏览次数：4368  类别：中文作文  

    What we cannot afford to lose is keeping a positive and optimistic attitude forever.Even though life is not always going smoothly.It may bring us hurts,difficulties or something else.We should keep a positive and optimistic attitude all the time.

    In the next time,I'm going to tell you about a accurate story.An American called Chris Gardner.He is a positive and optimistic salesman.His business is too bad to make a living.His wife left him.No money for rent.The landlord let him move out.He asked his friends for help but no one helped him.Without living place,he lived at public toilet or the rescue center.The most important thing is that he had to take care of his son as he worked.What's more?In order to get a job.He must work three months for free to pass the probation.Fortunately,he passed it and won the job.Eventually,he succeeded and lived a happy life.

    From this story,if we keep a positive and optimistic attitude.We would be the luckiest one sooner or later.

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      What we cannot afford to lose is keeping a positive and optimistic attitude forever.Even though life is not always going smoothly.It may bring us hurts injuries ,difficulties or something else.We should keep a positive and optimistic attitude all the time.

      In the next time,Then I'm going to tell you about a an accurate story about An an American called Chris Gardner.He is a positive and optimistic salesman.His business is too bad to make a living.His wife left him.No money for rent.The landlord let him move out.He asked his friends for help but no one helped him.Without living place He had no place to live , so he lived at public toilet or the rescue center.The most important thing is that he also  had to work to take care of his son as he worked.What's more?In order to get a job，He  he must worked three months for free to pass the probation.Fortunately,he passed it and won the job.Eventually,he succeeded and lived a happy life.

      From this story, The story told us :if If we keep a positive and optimistic attitude，We we would be the luckiest one lucky sooner or later.