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发布时间：2014-08-16 13:53:42 作者：扑天雕李泽雨  发布者：2663460194 浏览次数：2576  类别：英文作文  

It was a quiet village in which there was a military camp. It was far from the towns and
cities and there were some high mountains around. Of course it was a good place for training
the new soldiers. But it was difficult for the young men to go outside. Mr. White, an officer
of forty, was strict with them and he hardly let them leave the camp.
 .     Once Mr.  White was ill in bed.  He couldn't work and a young officer, Mr.  Hunt began
to train the new soldiers instead of him. He knew the young men well and let nine soldiers go
to the nearest town to have a holiday. But night fell and none came back to the camp. He was
worried about it and stood at the gate. It was five to twelve when Mr. Hunt deoided to go to
the town and see what was happening to the young men. He started the car quickly and set
off. At that moment the nine soldiers came back. It seemed they drank wine. Of course they
found the officer was angry.
     "I'm sorry, sir," said the first soldier. "I left the town on time. But something was
wrong with my bus on my way here. I had to buy a horse and made it run fast. Bad luckl It
died and I had to run back.
     And the other seven soldiers said they were late for the same reasons. It was the last
soldier's turn. He said, "I'm sorry, sir. I got on a bus on time, but ....,
     Having heard this, the officer became even angrier and stopped him at once. He called
out,  "If you say something was wrong with your bus, I'll punish you at once! "
"No, no, sir, " said the young man.

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  It was a quiet village in which there was (has) a military camp. It was far from the towns and
  cities and there were some high mountains around ^it. Of course it was a good place for training
  the new soldiers. But it was difficult for the young men to go outside. Mr. White, an ^40-year-old officer
  of forty, was strict with them and he hardly let them leave the camp.
  .     Once Mr.  White was ill in bed.  He couldn't work and a young officer, Mr.  Hunt began
  to train the new soldiers instead of him. He knew the young men well and let nine soldiers go
  to the nearest town to have a holiday. But ^when night fell and none came back to the camp. He was
  worried about it and stood at the gate. It was five to twelve when Mr. Hunt deoided to go to
  the town and see what was happening (had happened) to the young men. He started the car quickly and set
  off. At that moment the nine soldiers came back. It seemed ^that they drank wine (a lot). Of course they
  found the officer was angry.
  "I'm sorry, sir," said the first soldier. "I left the town on time. But ^{there was} something was
  wrong with my bus on my way here. I had to buy a horse and made it run fast. Bad luckl It
  died and I had to run back.
  And the other seven soldiers said they were late for the same reasons. It was ^turned the last
  soldier's turn. He said, "I'm sorry, sir. I got on a bus on time, but ....,
  Having heard this, the officer became even angrier and stopped him at once. He called
  out,  "If you say ^{there was} something was wrong with your bus, I'll punish you at once! "
  "No, no, sir, " said the young man. (What did the young man say?)