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发布时间：2014-10-07 22:15:56 作者：李四  发布者：英语傻X 浏览次数：3366  类别：英文作文  

 In one picture,we can see a young man who are fondness of Backham,worote his name on face in order to express his crasy love for him.The other,we found a active guy who spend 300$ to ask hairstylist to cut a hairstyle the same as Backham's.

     Those photos reveal  that our bindly persuit of famous stars,like sports stars,actors or singers,in recent society.it appears a worrying,unhealthy society atmosphers among our young generation.this trend can be put down a host of factors,which should gained great concerns.

    Indeed,those phenomenon should be put down to the lack of right and siginificant valueable notions about our life and dreams.So more and more person get in to wrong way:persuing of luxsury, crasy loving for stars or taking  some extreme actions when in plight.Nowadays,we can not emphsize the improtance of healthy and positive view of life too much.

    from a devolopment standpoint,it is time for our public to take actions to stop those distorted social scane.we should emphsize the important role of "modal" in our life,which help us to establish a influential ,publical and fight the view of valueable life.it is useful for our young man to understand the significant of dream:we should become a man like stars in heart,not appearance.

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  In one picture,we can see a young man who are fondness of  (is)  Backham  (Beckham's fan),worote (painted) his name on ^his face in order to express his crasy (crazy) love for him.The (From) ^the other ^picture, we found a (an) active guy who spend (spent) 300$ ($300) to ask hairstylist to (having his hair) cut a hairstyle (,which is as) the same as Backham's. (Beckham's)

  Those photos reveal that our bindly (blindly) persuit (chase) of famous stars,like sports stars,actors or singers,in recent society.it appears a worrying,unhealthy (worrisome) society atmosphers (atmosphere) among our young generation.this trend (tendency) can be put down (cause) host of ^unstable factors,which should gained great concerns.

  Indeed,^{the reasons of} those phenomenon should be put down to (are) the lack of right and siginificant (significant) valueable notions about our life and dreams.So more and more person get in to wrong way: persuing of (pursuing) luxsury (luxury) crasy (crazily) loving for stars or taking some extreme actions when in plight.Nowadays,we can not (must) emphsize (emphasize) the improtance (importance) of healthy and positive view of life too much.

  from a ^sustainable devolopment (development) standpoint,it is time for our (the) public to take actions to stop those distorted social scane. we should emphsize (emphasize) the important role of "modal" in our life,which help us to establish a influential ,publical (public) and fight the view of valueable (valuable) life.it is useful for our young man to understand the significant of dream:we should become a man like stars in heart (inside) not appearance (surface)