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love among family members

发布时间：2012-10-06 18:42:07 作者：王帅  发布者：20121001 浏览次数：4002  类别：中文作文   优秀指数：★

  Most people think that nothing is more important and valuable than love among the family members in the world.

  It is without doubt that love among family members is very important for us. My family can bring us great help when we are in trouble. When we can’t make a decision, it can give us some good advice; when we feel happy, it can share happiness with us. So, we must value it and love our family members.

  In the past I was a princess in the family. But late, my brother was born. Since then, My life revolved around my brother’s. When I want to play with my friend my parents always said “take you brother with you”. Sometimes my brother get in trouble, my parents always blamed me. I think my parents no longer love me, which made me so sad. Later, while I was bad hurt, I was taken good care of my parents. And my brother spoke a joke for me when I feel unhappiness.

  I know my family love me very much now. So value love among family members and you’ll feel happy and successful every day.

• 批改教师：冯琼英 ( 山东省 >> 临沂市 >> 罗庄区 >> 黄山镇 >> 黄山镇英语备课组 )
  批改时间：2012/10/6 22:05:18
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    Most people think that nothing is more important and valuable than love among the family members in the world.

    It is without doubt that love among family members is very important for us. My family can bring us great help when we are in trouble. When we can’t make a decision, it can give us some good advice; when we feel happy, it can share happiness with us. So, we must value it and love our family members.

    In the past I was a princess in the family. But late, my brother was born. Since then, my life revolved around my brother’s. When I want to play with my friends my parents always said “take your brother with you”. Sometimes my brother got in trouble, my parents always blamed me. I think my parents no longer love me, which made me so sad. Later, while I was bad hurt, I was taken good care of my parents. And my brother spoke a joke for me when I feel unhappiness.

    I know my family members love me very much now. So value love among family members and you’ll feel happy and successful every day.

  一年级的小同学能写出那么长的英语短文，着实让我很佩服啊

• 批改教师：王天艳 ( 山东省 >> 临沂市 >> 罗庄区 >> 黄山镇 >> 黄山镇英语备课组 )
  批改时间：2012/10/7 16:21:38
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    Most people think that nothing is more important and valuable than love among the family members in the world.

    It is without no doubt that love among family members is very important for us. My family can bring us great help when we are in trouble. When we can’t make a decision, it they can give us some good advice; when we feel happy, it they can share happiness with us. So, we must value it and love our family members.

    In the past I was a princess in the my family. But late, later, my brother was born. Since then, My my life revolved around my brother’s. brother. When I want wanted to play with my friend, my parents always said “take you brother with you”. Sometimes my brother get got in trouble, my parents always blamed me. I think my parents no longer love me, which made me so sad. Later, while I was bad hurt, I was taken good care of my parents. my parents took good care of me. And my brother spoke a joke told his joke for me when I feel unhappiness.felt unhappy.

    I know my family love me very much now. So we must value love among family members and you’ll we'll feel happy and successful every day.

  You are very clever.Come on!