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The Best Way to Stay Healthy

发布时间：2014-11-10 18:16:02 作者：李丽雯  发布者：biubiuasdf 浏览次数：4076  类别：英文作文  

In the modern society ,with economy’s rapid development ,more and more people begin to pay attention to their own health.However,ways to keep healthy aren’t the same.

Some people work out,some people keep a balanced diet, ,others choose to depend on medical treatment.In my opinion,only when you combine them together can you achieve your final goal---keep healthy.

There’s no doubt that people in the modern society keep a rapid pace of life,they are busy earning money ,but they often ignore their own physical condition.But after all,you won’t get any work done if your physical conditions are bad.Therefore,when we are not busy doing our work,we’d better go out and do exercises. Besides, we should adjust our unhealthy habits to good ones.We should have more fruits and vegetables,as the saying goes:one apple a day keeps doctors away.We should avoid having much sweet、alcohol、especially cigarettes.Don’t stay up too late,keep a good mood .

There’re lots of ways to stay healthy,but if you wouldn’t take action,all methods would be useless.For your own development, please pay attention to your physical conditions.

 

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  In the modern society ,with economy’s rapid development ,more and more people begin to pay attention to their own health.However,ways to keep^ing healthy aren’t the same (resemble).

  Some people work out,some people keep a balanced diet, others choose to depend on medical treatment.In my opinion,only when you combine them together can you achieve your final goal---keep healthy.

  There’s no doubt that people in the modern society keep a rapid pace of life,they are busy earning money ,but (so) they often ignore their own physical condition.But after all,you won’t get any work done if your physical conditions are bad.Therefore,when we are not busy doing our work ^{all the time},we’d (and had) better go out and do exercises. Besides, we should adjust our unhealthy habits to good ones.We should have more fruits and vegetables,as the saying goes:one apple a day keeps doctors away.We should avoid having much sweet、alcohol、especially cigarettes.Don’t stay up too late,^and keep a good mood .

  There’re lots of ways to stay (keeping) healthy,but if you wouldn’t (didn't) take action,all methods would be useless.For your own development, please pay attention to your physical conditions.