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A Kind Girl I Will Appreciate In My Whole Life

发布时间：2014-11-24 12:28:52 作者：杨文利  发布者：1248767417 浏览次数：3426  类别：英文作文  

After the college entrance examnation,I enrolled myself into the XiaMen University.Not only is it because of my deligence,but it's also because of one girl with gold heart. It was at 14:30 in June 8th,just 30 minutes before English exam,which was the last exam.Like many other students,I was outside my examination hall,reciting my English notes over and over again nervously,because it was one of the most important exams in my life.Shortly,the teacher went out and announced that we could enter the examination hall.So I put down my English notes and prepared to went into the examination hall.Unfortunately,I found my test card was gone.Everyone knew that I couldn't take the exam without the test card.I made frantic search for it.I searched every nook and cranny but I dindn't find it.Then I fell into despair and sort out my things,preparing to leave and return here next year. All the dream ended in smoke.I was very sad.Just before I left,I heard my name called.I turned around and saw a girl running to me out of breath.She was exhausted and said hysterically:"Here is your test card.I picked up it on the road.Please enter the examination hall quickly."I was so moved that I forgot to say thank you.I can't recall every specific at that time,I just know I took the exam with appreciation successfully and when I went out,the girl was gone. I've never met the girl since then.I will appreciate her in my whole life.It is she who taught me to help others as much as possible.I've done it all time to repay the girl.And now, I want to say to her:thank you.

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  After the college entrance examnation,I enrolled myself into the XiaMen University.Not only is it because of my deligence,but it's also because of one girl with gold (who has goldern) heart.

  It was at 14:30 in June 8th,just 30 minutes before English exam,which was the last exam.Like many other students,I was outside my examination hall,reciting my English notes over and over again nervously,because it was one of the most important exams in my life.Shortly,the teacher went out and announced that we could enter the examination hall.So I put down my English notes and prepared to went into the examination hall.Unfortunately,I found my test card was gone.Everyone knew that I couldn't take the exam without the test card.I made frantic search for it.I searched every nook and cranny but I dindn't find it.Then I fell into despair and sort out my things,preparing to leave and return here next year. All the dream ended in smoke.I was very sad.Just before I left,I heard my name ^wascalled.I turned around and saw a girl running to me out of breath.She was exhausted and said hysterically:"Here is your test card.I picked up it on the road.Please enter the examination hall quickly."I was so moved that I forgot to say thank you.I can't recall every specific ^moment at that time,I just know I took the exam with appreciation successfully and when I went out,the girl was gone. I've never met the girl since then.I will appreciate her in my whole life.It is she who taught me to help others as much as possible.I've done it all time to repay the girl.And now, I want to say to her:thank you.