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My public speech experience
发布时间:2014-12-12 23:15:20 作者:Lily  发布者:flying_winter 浏览次数:6585  类别:英文作文  
[大学二年级] 山东省 >> 济宁市 >> 曲阜市 >> 曲阜师范大学


I still remember how stressed I was to gave a speech as a student present at that time in the opening ceremony of my kinder garden. This public speech, for me,a 7-year-old girl, had a vital meaning ---- it was a great honor for me to give a speech on behalf of freshmen and it would be the first time to speak in public. I cannot sleep at the night before speech, being thinking every word on my speech draft,imagining everything might happen in the process of it all night. What if I forget the word what I would say? What should I do if I make a great mistake when I speak? How I ought to handle with those unexpected occasions?

Next morning, I got up very early while I cannot help being nervous. Shivering, with a empty brain, I stepped to the platform. I felt thousands of eyes were staring at me. What slightly behaviors I had were all in their views. However,the only thing I can do now is to start my speech.

After taking a deep breath ,I started my words. Caring noting except my speech draft, I had done this giant task finally. Another deep breath ,I walked down to get my seat with the sound of clapping.

Until up now,even if I cannot recall the details about the draft and the speech, the prepares I made for this speech committed to my memory. Looking upon down quantities of reference materials, asking help for my teacher, by modifying and modifying ,my speech draft was born.Then I read it again and again to see to it that I can speak it fluently. It took me around 6 days to prepare and 8 minutes to give the public speech.How unforgettable it was!!

Nowadays, it was still a brilliant experience for me. This public speech alway motivated me to advance constantly.

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    I still remember how stressed (nervous) I was to (when I) gave a speech as a student present at that time in the opening ceremony of my kindergarden. This public speech, for me,a 7-year-old girl, had a vital meaning ---- it was a great honor for me to give a speech on behalf of freshmen and it would be the first time to speak in public. I cannot (couldn't) sleep at the night before speech, being thinking (carefully thought) every word on my speech draft,imagining (and surpposed) everything might happen in the process of it all night. What if I forget the word what I would say? What should I do if I make a great mistake when I speak? How I ought to handle with those unexpected occasions?

    Next morning, I got up very early while (because) I cannot (couldn't) help being nervous (panic). Being shivering, with an empty brain, I stepped to the platform. I felt that thousands of eyes were staring at me. What slightly behaviors I had (Whatever my slight behaviors) were (would be) all in their views. However,the only thing I can (could) do now is (was) to start my speech.

    After taking a deep breath ,I started my words. Caring noting except my speech draft, I finally had done (accomplished) this giant task . Another deep breath ,I walked down to get my seat with the sound of clapping.

    Until up now,even if I cannot recall the details about the draft and the speech, the prepares (preapreation) I made for this speech committed to my memory. Looking upon down quantities of reference materials, asking help for my teacher, by modifying and modifying ,my speech draft was born.Then I read it again and again to see to (adapt) it so that I can speak it fluently. It took me around 6 days to prepare and 8 minutes to give the public speech.How unforgettable it was!!

    Nowadays, it was still a brilliant experience for me. This public speech alway motivated me to advance constantly.

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