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发布时间:2014-12-16 22:16:18 作者:lisa  发布者:shanshan 浏览次数:3084  类别:英文作文  
[大学二年级] 浙江省 >> 温州市 >> 瓯海区 >> 茶山街道


    Falling in love the first time is all froth and fantasy. I met someone and he gradually occupied my mind and thoughts. Although he was no longer by my side, I still appreciate him for the old good days and those wonderful feelings he had brought to me.

    First loves are always indelibly etched into our minds. Love may fade, but memories will always be there. I can still remember the white T-shirt he wore on that beautiful summer day. Eyes closing, the scene he played basketball again recurred and his voice and smiling face comes back to me. I will never forget my heart’s flipping every morning when I saw him on his bike. We were so innocent and shy that we even dare not to say hello, which is unique to puppy love.

    There is nothing holier, in life of ours, than the first consciousness of love. This pure relationship has nothing to do with interests, vanity, and other complicated reasons. It happened just because his smile fascinated me and his warm words knocked at my heart. And the greatest joy during that phrase was the joy I saw in his.

    Nevertheless, my first love had already gone with the wind. We broke up for some reason. Love faded as time passes by. When recalling these fantastic memories, I can again find the feeling which once palpitated with excitement eager. It doesn’t mean that I still love him, but the nice feeling is bound to be the most precious treasure in my whole life.

    Since I have been in a stable relationship now, I’ll cherish it, but not get myself so used to the past. There’s always a glamorous scenario in my mind that years later, there’ll be a reliable man, who’s modest and gentle, staying with me. The simple future life with my beloved one and an adorable puppy may move my heart again. Maybe I’ll gain my first love for the second time at that time.
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  • 批改教师:王思捷 ( 作文批改网 )
    批改时间:2014/12/17 8:43:04
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    Falling in love for the first time is all froth and fantasy (fantastic). I met someone and he gradually occupied my mind and thoughts. Although he was no longer by my side  (accompanied with me), I still appreciated him for the old good days and those wonderful feelings he had brought to me.

       First loves are always indelibly etched into our minds. Love (The passion) may fade, but memories will always be there. I can still remember the white T-shirt he wore on that beautiful summer day. Eyes closing (Closing eyes), the scene he played basketball again recurred on me and his voice and smiling face comes back to me. I will never forget my heart’s flipping every morning when I saw him on his bike. We were so innocent and shy that we even dare not to say hello, which is unique to puppy love.

       There is nothing holier, in life of ours (our lives), than the first consciousness of love. This pure relationship (friendship) has nothing to do (not compounded) with interests, vanity, and other complicated reasons. It happened just because his smile fascinated (appealed) me and his warm words knocked at my heart. And the greatest joy during that phrase was the joy I saw in his.

       Nevertheless, my first love had already gone with the wind. We broke up for some reasons. Love (The mood) faded as time passes (goes) by. When recalling these fantastic memories, I can  find the feeling which once palpitated with excitement eager again. It doesn’t mean that I still love him, but the nice feeling is bound to be the most precious treasure in my whole life.

       Since I have been in a (another) stable relationship now, I’ll cherish it, but not get myself so used to the past. There’s always a glamorous scenario in my mind that years later, there’ll be a reliable man, who’s modest and gentle, staying with me. The simple future life with my beloved one and an adorable puppy may move my heart again. Maybe I’ll gain my first love for the second time at that time.
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