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Heroic me
发布时间:2014-12-16 22:17:36 作者:lisa  发布者:shanshan 浏览次数:3183  类别:英文作文  
[大学二年级] 浙江省 >> 温州市 >> 瓯海区 >> 茶山街道


    I was absolutely valiant in that fight.

    It was an afternoon when my family and I were sitting in the yard, chatting. It was all of a sudden that several evildoers rushed in with guns in their hands. It was such kind of scene that only appeared in action films.

    Everyone riveted to the ground with fear, with faces paled and limbs trembled. We finally came to ourselves when my younger sister’s screaming of terror aroused our awareness of self-rescue. I had never been more clear-thinking while in danger. I let my parents and little sister came into the house, leaving myself alone, faced with those "uninvited guests".

    Then I bust out my big gun and whip when their bullets were shot towards me. Holding gun in my left hand and whip in the other, I began my counterattack. The enemies were soon retreated several meters backward in the rain of bullets and continuous lashing. As my beating back went on, they could no longer hold on and finally fled away. I didn't know how it came that I was so bold and able to fight. But it was true that I protected my family from dager.

    “Time to get up,my dear.” Mom’s voice came and I gradually came to myself.

    Oh, it's a dream. The heroic me is only a dream.

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    I was absolutely valiant in that fight.

      It was an afternoon when my family and I were sitting (seating) in the yard, chatting. It was all of a sudden that several evildoers rushed in with guns in their hands. It was such a kind of scene that only appeared in action films.

      Everyone riveted to (stood on) the ground with fear, with  paled faces and trembled limbs . We finally came to ourselves when my younger sister’s screaming of terror aroused our awareness of self-rescue. I had never been more clear-thinking while in danger. I let my parents and little sister came into the house, leaving myself alone, faced (and facing) with those "uninvited guests".

      Then I bust out my big gun and whipped when their bullets were shot towards me. Holding gun in my left hand and whip in the other, I began my counterattack. The enemies were soon retreated several meters backward in the rain of bullets and continuous lashing. As my beating back went on, they could no longer hold on and finally fled away. I didn't know how it came that I was so bold and able to fight. But it was true that I protected my family from dager (danger).

      “Time to get up,my dear.” Mom’s voice came and I gradually (adruptly) came to myself.

      Oh, it's a dream. The heroic me is only a dream.

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