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What is real beauty

发布时间：2015-02-25 09:45:53 作者：王诺贤  发布者：TP1001 浏览次数：4199  类别：中文作文  

 

It  is  human  nature  that  everyone   adores   beauty.  With  the  rising  of  our  living  standard , people’s  requirement  of  beauty  has  been  heightened accordingly .

Nowadays ,  people  neglect  the  spiritual  pursuit  rather  than  addicted  to  material .

But I think  virtue  is  fairer  far  than  beauty  .

In the first place . I  would  like  to  use  a  meaning  story  to  tell  anyone :don’t  use fame  and  gain  to  dust  the  eyes  of  true  beauty .A singer  who  specializes  in  singing as  well  has  a  beautiful  voice . She also  has  an  aptitude  for  “Devotion  of  love ’’  After with  the  great  achievements , she  was  wrapped  in  applause  and  wealth .  She  rejected  the  most  beautiful  heart  and  the  fantastic  song  as  yet . From  here  please  but  until  then  the  beauty   lying  in  one’s  heart  of  hearts  and  embodied  in  his  actions  and  deeds , it  is  the  inner  beauty  .

But foe  my  part ,we  shouldn’t  only  pay  attention  to  / take  notice  of  money ,fashionable  hair  styles  and  the  improvement  of   their  looks .Superficial shallow  is  substituted  by  inner  beauty  .Just  like  a  Clarence Russian writer  in  words  much  like  this  :Don’t  go  for  looks  beautiful  and  beautiful  because of  heart.

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  It is human nature that everyone adores beauty. With the rising of our living standard , people’s requirement of beauty has been heightened accordingly .

  Nowadays , people neglect the spiritual pursuit rather than addicted to material .

  But I think virtue is fairer far than beauty .

  In the first place . I would like to use a meaning story to tell anyone :don’t use fame and gain to dust the eyes of true beauty .A singer who specializes in singing as well has a beautiful voice . She also has an aptitude for “Devotion of love ’’ After with the great achievements , she was wrapped in applause and wealth . She rejected the most beautiful heart and the fantastic song as yet . From here please but until then the beauty lying in one’s heart of hearts and embodied in his actions and deeds , it is the inner beauty .

  But foe my part ,we shouldn’t only pay attention to / take notice of money ,fashionable hair styles and the improvement of their looks .Superficial shallow is substituted by inner beauty .Just like a Clarence Russian writer in words much like this :Don’t go for looks beautiful and beautiful because of heart.