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The Phenomenon of Empty Nesters
发布时间:2015-03-01 09:38:46 作者:徐馨怡  发布者:giolle 浏览次数:1690  类别:英文作文  
[大学一年级] 山东省 >> 济南市 >> 历城区 >> 港沟镇


In front of the mirror sat an old woman saying what her family members were doing now, looking at the reflection in the mirror, with her shadow along with her.

What no one can avoid being influenced by is the phenomenon that old people without children's company stay at home alone feel lonely. The reasons accounting for the phenomenon that empty nesters can be listed as the young people's busy work. But we can not deny the truth that the best way to let aged people happy is children's company, which becomes harder and harder for children's busy work and fast pace of life. Unfortunately, only little young people are aware of the loneliness of old people.

Obviously, if we are blind to the aged people without children's company, there's every chance that the whole society will lack love and responsibility. As a result, we should appeal to loving and caring aged people.

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    In front of the mirror sat an old woman saying what her family members were doing now, looking at the reflection in the mirror, with her shadow along with her.

    What no one can avoid being influenced by is the phenomenon that old people without children's company stay at home alone feel lonely. The reasons accounting for the phenomenon that empty nesters can be listed as the young people's busy work. But we can not deny the truth that the best way to let aged (making the old) people happy is children's company, which becomes harder and harder for children's busy work and fast pace of life. Unfortunately, only little young people are aware of the loneliness of old people ('s loneliness).

    Obviously, if we are blind (pay no attention) to the aged people without children's company, there's every chance that the whole society will lack love and responsibility. As a result, we should appeal to loving and caring aged people.

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