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发布时间:2015-03-26 15:29:11 作者:苏美华  发布者:上善若shui 浏览次数:1613  类别:英文作文   优秀指数:★★
[非在校学生] 河北省 >> 石家庄市 >> 裕华区 >> 裕华路街道


Dear John,

     I used to live a life just like yours.But now I feel happy.If you want to listen,I would like to give you some suggestions.My suggestion is to take some time off your work and go back to visit your parents and friends.Consider changing a job which requires fewer hours so that you may have time to make frends.You may also try to take classes on a subject you are interested in or pursue a hobby.You are sure to find life worth living.

                                                                                                                                          Yours,

                                                                                                                                           Abby

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  • 批改教师:王思捷 ( 作文批改网 )
    批改时间:2015/3/26 21:00:36
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    Dear John,

    I used to live a life just like yours.But now I feel happy.If you want to listen,I would like to give you some suggestions.My suggestion is to take some time off your work and go back to visit your parents and friends.Consider changing a job which requires fewer hours so that you may have time to make frends.(I don't understand.)You may also try to take classes on a subject you are interested in or pursue a hobby.You are sure to find life worth living.

    Yours,

    Abby

        How was your life? What is the theme?

  • 批改教师:胡进献 ( 上海市 >> 青浦区 >> 华新镇 )
    批改时间:2015/3/29 21:29:05
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    Dear John,

         I used to live a life just like yours.But now I feel happy.If you want to listen,I would like to give you some suggestions.My suggestion is to take some time off your work and go back to visit your parents and friends.Consider changing a job which requires fewer hours so that you may have time to make frends.You may also try to take classes on a subject you are interested in or pursue a hobby.You are sure to find life worth living.

                                                                                                                                              Yours,

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