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Star-worshipping

发布时间：2015-10-18 13:54:57 作者：袁露菲  发布者：JeanNo3 浏览次数：3789  类别：英文作文  

Vividly and impressively, the two photos respectively epitomise a universal phenomenon of star-worshipping among the Chinese nowadays which followed by a trend that a marvelous number of the youngster, like the fan of Beckham-an English football star-in the photos, write their idol's name on face and even some others re-style their hair to express their enthusiasm for famous person they like in a high price.
Unfortunately, this kind of strong feeling about idols oversteps the boundary in most cases. For instance, the so-called "Super Girls" were known well all around the country almost overnight, with fans chasing after them in blind worship. On the one hand, fans of a great deal do not actually know the one who they are keen on. On the other hand, they fail to recognise what character the successful ones have is the truly treasure worthy of admiring.
It is my view that prosperous individuals deserve our favor and earn our respect by their hard work and personal charm. What we ought to learn is their spirit, not the superficial behaviour. Only by correcting our attitude towards idolism can we assure a positive way to live a more significant life.

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  Vividly and impressively, the two photos respectively epitomise a universal phenomenon of star-worshipping among the Chinese nowadays which followed by a trend that a marvelous number of the youngster, like the fan of Beckham^{'s fan} （改成这样简洁）-an English football star-in the photos, write （真得是write上去的吗？我觉得不是，是用贴纸贴上去的，用stick）their idol's name on face and even some others re-style their hair to express their enthusiasm for famous person they like in a high price.
  Unfortunately, this kind of strong feeling about idols oversteps the boundary in most （没有比较级用many就可以了）cases. For instance, the so-called "Super Girls" were known well all around the country almost overnight, with fans chasing after them in blind worship. On the one hand, fans of a great deal ^{of fans} do not actually know the one who （有些模糊，粉丝们当然知道追的是谁，但是明星的哪些东西值得他们追求和热衷的他们并不了解。所以应该改成which features of those stars）they are keen on. On the other hand, they fail to recognise what characters the successful ones have is the truly treasure worthy of admiring.
  It is my view that prosperous individuals deserve our favor and earn our respect by their hard work and charm of personality (personal charm). What we ought to learn is their spirit, not the superficial life style （感觉用behaviors更好）. Only by correcting our attitude towards idolism can we assure a positive way to live a better life （观点还是太绝对）.