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civilized travel
发布时间:2015-10-18 18:05:14 作者:葛欣悦  发布者:gexinyue 浏览次数:3807  类别:英文作文  
[高中一年级]


Nowadays,more and more Chinese people travel aborad,but their bad behaviors become a hot topic.It's reported that Chinese people are the second worst tourists.How can we travel civilizely?Here are some advice for you.

First,don't taik loudly.If we talk loudly in public,we will disturb others.Second,waitting in line for waitting or dinnering.It is a way to make things in good order .Third,don't spit or throw throughout.It's a terrible behavior that not only destroies the environment but also makes others dislikied.Finally, don't scribble.It will let someone feel you are low quality.What' more,we should be friendlly and polite to others in traveling.

Although Chinese people are not welcome in some countries,I think we will be popular if we have done these above.

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    Nowadays,more and more Chinese people (Chinese原本有“中国人”的意思) travel aborad,but their bad behaviors become a hot topic.It's reported that the (前面提到了Chinese,要加the)Chinese people are regarded as the second worst tourists.How can we travel civilizely (civilisedly,副词“文明地”)?Here are some advices for you.

    First,don't taik (speak) loudly.If we talk loudly in public,we will disturb others.Second,waitting in line for (when you will be) just waitting or dinnering (没有dinnering这个词汇,如果想表达“候餐”用waiting for dinner,用祈使句的话动词原形开头就可以).It is a way to make things in good order .Third,don't spit or throw throughout.It's a terrible behavior that not only destroies (destory是指“不可修复的毁灭”这里用pullute就可以了) the environment but also makes others dislikied (想表达“感觉不舒服”用feel sick).Finally, don't scribble.It will let someone feel you are low quality.What' more,we should be friendlly and polite to others in traveling.

    Although Chinese people are not welcomed in some countries,I think we will be popular if we have done (achieve,if条件句结构问题) these above.

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