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may be you should relax

发布时间：2012-11-02 19:42:42 作者：徐畅  发布者：水之碎碎念 浏览次数：3560  类别：中文作文   优秀指数：★

Our life are very busy. The school days are busy enough. After school, we should take piano lessons. So we can't get home until 7 pm. We have a quick supper, and it's time for homework. I think parents are trying to plan their kids' lives for them. When these kids are adults, they might find it difficult to plan things for themselves. Parents should learn to give their kids a bit more time to themselves. On the one hand, children need organized activities. On the other hand, they also need time and freedom to relax, and they need time to do things by themselves

• 批改教师：冯琼英 ( 山东省 >> 临沂市 >> 罗庄区 >> 黄山镇 >> 黄山镇英语备课组 )
  批改时间：2012/11/3 15:23:04
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  Our life（lives） are very busy. The school days are busy enough. After school, we should take piano lessons. So we can't get home until 7 pm. We have a quick supper, and（then） it's time for homework. I think our parents are trying to plan their kids' lives for them. When these kids are adults, they might find it difficult to plan things for themselves. Parents should learn to give their kids a bit more time to themselves. On the one hand, children need organized activities. On the other hand, they also need time and freedom to relax, and they need time to do things by themselves.

  经常和你的父母聊聊，如果你心里烦闷的话。

• 批改教师：杜宝红 ( 山东省 >> 泰安市 >> 岱岳区 >> 泰山菁华双语学校 )
  批改时间：2012/11/4 12:58:12
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  Our life are ^isvery busy.The school days are busy enough. After school, we should take piano lessons. So we can't get home until 7 pm. We have a quick supper, and it's time for homework. I think parents are trying to plan their kids' lives for them. When these kids are adults, they might find it difficult to plan things for themselves. Parents should learn to give their kids a bit more time to themselves. On the one hand, children need organized activities. On the other hand, they also need time and freedom to relax, and they need time to do things by themselves

  孩子，想学好英语，背诵大量优美的句子对你学习会很有帮助，但要学会灵活运用。这篇文章大部分内容直接来源于教材，没做任何改变，我认为要想让自己写作进步的更快，还要靠自己多动笔，多思考，写出具有自己特色的文章来。加油，孩子，相信自己！你一定可以写得更好！

• 批改教师：王天艳 ( 山东省 >> 临沂市 >> 罗庄区 >> 黄山镇 >> 黄山镇英语备课组 )
  批改时间：2012/11/8 18:22:27
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  Our life are is very busy. The school days are busy enough very busy,too. After school, we should take have piano lessons. So ,so we can't get home until 7 pm. We have a quick supper, and it's time for homework. I think parents are always trying to plan their kids' lives for them. When these their kids are adults, they might find that it is difficult to plan things for themselves. Parents should learn to give their kids a bit more time to themselves. On the one hand, children need organized activities. On the other hand, they also need time and freedom to relax, and they need time to do things by themselves.