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To be sent to school or not

发布时间：2016-02-28 23:34:28 作者：尼皓然  发布者：NHR1412 浏览次数：4915  类别：英文作文   优秀指数：★★

  The day before yesterday,our class had a discussion about whether we should be sent to school or not.Everyone had their opinion about it.

  Some of the students thought we should be sent to school.Because we study too hard,we need to have a rest.And it takes too much time to go to school on foot.Being sent to school is much safer than going to school by yourself.Other students thought take a bike and walk to school are the best ways.They thought it is very green,and we should protect our environment.It's good for our health too,it can make us strong.

  As for me,the second opinion is better.If we are sent to school just because it can save time,it will be too much cars on the road and the environment will be worse.It's our duty to protect the earth,so I,m agree with the students who had the second opinion.

• 批改教师：汤超然 ( 云南省 >> 昆明市 >> 西山区 )
  批改时间：2019/7/30 9:47:46
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  The day before yesterday,our class had a discussion about（on） whether we should be sent to school or not.Everyone had their opinions about it.

  Some of the students thought we should be sent to school.Because we study too hard,we need to have a rest.And it takes too much time to go to school on foot.Being sent to school is much safer than going to school by yourself（ourselves）.Other students thought take（taking） a bike and walk（walking） to school are the best ways.They thought it is very green,and we should protect our environment.It's good for our health too,it can make us strong.

  As for me,the second opinion is better.If we are sent to school just because it can save time,it will be too much cars on the road and the environment will be worse.It's our duty to protect the earth,so I,m agree with the students who had the second opinion.

  点评：正确切题，结构清晰，语言流畅，但缺少****语法项目，且存在较多语法错误，可锁定为二类中作文，最终得分：17分（满分25分）