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an impressive text
发布时间:2016-03-09 19:05:12 作者:舒玉龙  发布者:qq1981449045 浏览次数:2793  类别:中文作文   优秀指数:★★★
[大学一年级]


    Let me the deepest impression is the text 'The Doctor's Son'.This text mainly tell us that the author in different age to his father's attitude.The author's father is a doctor,in the author as a child he is proud to have such a father.But as he was growing up,he began to rebel.He hates others compare he and his father.As a result,he got his outside school.But when he bumped into someone else's car,he began to have such a father proud.
        When I was just on the text ,I have a feeling of empathy.In my childhood ,also some people praise me for my father.Look at the text,I seem to see for myself.There are a respectable father is a good thing.He is an example to you,aren't he?We should deal with family relationships ,family is our most precious wealth. 
       This is let me the most impressive of the text.
教师点评:
  • 批改教师:汤超然 ( 云南省 >> 昆明市 >> 西山区 )
    批改时间:2019/7/29 17:26:56
    点评指数:★★★
    点评内容:

        Let me the deepest impression(what impressed deepest ) is the text(named) 'The Doctor's Son'.This text mainly tells us that the author in different ages to his father's attitude.The author's father is a doctor,in the author as a child he is proud to have such a father.But as he was growing up,he began to rebel.He hates others comparing he(himself) and(with)his father.As a result,he got his outside school.But when he bumped into someone else's car,he began to have such a father proud.
    When I was just on the text ,I have a feeling of empathy.In my childhood ,also some people praise me for my father.Look at the text,I seem to see for myself.There are a respectable father is a good thing.He is an example to you,aren't he?We should deal with family relationships ,family is our most precious wealth.
    This is let me the most impressive of the text.

    点评:语法错误较多,正确切题,感情真挚,尽力使用****语法项目,确定为一类下,最终得分:21分(满分25分)

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