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What Will My Life Be in Twenty Years

发布时间：2016-03-13 21:19:34 作者：李世骏  发布者：135210369680 浏览次数：2924  类别：英文作文   优秀指数：★

In twenty years.I will be thirty-four years in Twenty years.I think i will be a successfui person.I will leave home and live in my own flat.I live near my mum and dad.I will visit them everyday.In my spare time,I will study English or math.Some times I will travel around.When on Firday I will play football with my friends.This is my life in Twenty years. 

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  In twenty years.I will be thirty-four years in Twenty years.I think i will be a successfui person.I will leave home and live in my own flat.I live near my mum and dad.I will visit them everyday.In my spare time,I will study English or math.Some times I will travel around.When on Firday I will play football with my friends.This is my life in Twenty years.

  点评：正确切题，应多使用长难句，同时要注意内容层次的丰富性，最终得分：16分（满分25分）