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Urben life or countryside life

发布时间：2016-10-23 20:39:14 作者：綦晨晓  发布者：1136318974 浏览次数：4005  类别：英文作文  

  As a shy girl growing up in the countryside,I am looking forward to live in a big city,where people can have a colorful life.So if I have to make a chioce between countryside life and urben life ,I prefer the urben life.

  I don't mean that I dislike countryside life.There lives my whole childhood.I feel happy and relaxed when recalling the days of childhood.I love my buddies,field,bugs and so on.What's more,the air in the countryside is fresh and make everyone comfortable.Further more,the river,I can't forget trees and flowers in my hometown.

  However,time passing by,I realise that I should touch the lifestyle beside my hometown and broaden my horizen.In the city.I can get so many message and knowledge.Besides,I have the chance to know more people from all over our country even from other countries.By sharing feelings and cuitures with them,my view can be widen.Also the big shopping centers which are imporsible to appear in my hometown offer us the opportunity to amuse.

  In conclusion,I am looking forward to the arrival of the city life in the future.

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  As a shy girl growing up in the countryside,I am looking forward to live (living) in a big city where people can have (lead) a colorful life.So if I have to make a chioce between countryside life and urben (urban) life ,I prefer the urben life.

  I don't mean that I dislike countryside life.There lives (buried) my whole childhood.I feel happy and relaxed when recalling the days of childhood.I love my buddies,field,bugs and so on.What's more,the air in the countryside is fresh and makes everyone comfortable.Further more,the river （所比何来？）,I can't forget trees and flowers in my hometown.

  However,time passing by,I realise that I should touch the lifestyle beside (out of) my hometown and broaden my horizen.In the city.I can get so many message and knowledge.Besides,I have the chance to know more people from all over our country even from other countries.By sharing feelings and cuitures with them,my view can be widen.Also the big shopping centers which are imporsible to appear in my hometown offer us the opportunity to amuse.

  In conclusion,I am looking forward to the arrival of the city life in the future.