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my life story

发布时间：2012-11-20 19:29:41 作者：何娟  发布者：uioikooo 浏览次数：5156  类别：英文作文  

My life story

Life like a paintting that everyone draw their color on it. My life maybe is green which disappears in lots of people. I love my life than everything.

There I want to talk about my uiversity life. When I first come to uiversity,I’m not enjoyable to my choice. On the contrary, I have made the decision that go to the better school. In the grade one of university, I challege myself and contact many new things. I always have a thought that I’m satisfied of what I have, so that I’m not willing to do extra things any more.

In the grade two of university, I find I’m last of classmates. In that time, I know I give up my decision. Difficult is always a barrier makes me afraid to try again. Taking part in the competion, the compion doubt my capacity. I know I can’t change everything, but I can choose negect this and do myself. Sometimes, a optimistic attitude will creat beautiful life.

My life is green at less I think. A small sun in my heart that I can see the sunlight everyday. I want to say university has taught me a lot. I learn how to be strong, how to be excellent and how to be happy. N ow, I have many friends, they help me and we share happiness and sorrow. University life is not as worse as I image. Everyday, the first thing I tell myself is smile. I love my life because it likes water which we need even though don’t have any taste.

There are always another mountain, always I want to move high. Life is long, one thing you should do is create your life. Drawing one color on your paintting, you will find the colorful of the world.

 

• 批改教师：冯琼英 ( 山东省 >> 临沂市 >> 罗庄区 >> 黄山镇 >> 黄山镇英语备课组 )
  批改时间：2012/11/25 15:22:23
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  My life story

  Life like a paintting（picture） that everyone draw （draws）their color on it. My life maybe is green which disappears in lots of people. I love my life than everything.

  There I want to talk about my uiversity life. When I first come to uiversity,I’m not enjoyable to my choice. On the contrary, I have made the decision that go to the better school. In the grade one of university, I challege myself and contact many new things. I always have a thought that I’m satisfied of what I have, so that I’m not willing to do extra things any more.

  In the grade two of university, I find I’m last of classmates. In that time, I know I give up my decision. Difficult is always a barrier makes me afraid to try again. Taking part in the competion, the compion doubt my capacity. I know I can’t change everything, but I can choose negect this and do myself. Sometimes, a optimistic attitude will creat beautiful life.

  My life is green at less I think. A small sun in my heart that I can see the sunlight everyday. I want to say university has taught me a lot. I learn how to be strong, how to be excellent and how to be happy. N ow, I have many friends, they help me and we share happiness and sorrow. University life is not as worse as I image. Everyday, the first thing I tell myself is smile. I love my life because it likes water which we need even though don’t have any taste.

  There are always another mountain, always I want to move high. Life is long, one thing you should do is create your life. Drawing one color on your paintting, you will find the colorful of the world.

   

• 批改教师：王爱云 ( 山东省 >> 临沂市 >> 罗庄区 >> 黄山镇 >> 黄山镇语文备课组 >> 三年级 )
  批改时间：2012/11/25 15:30:48
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  My life story

  Life like a paintting(picture) that everyone draw their color (colour)on it. My life maybe is green which disappears in lots of people. I love my life than everything.

  There I want to talk about my uiversity life. When I first come to uiversity,I’m not enjoyable to my choice. On the contrary, I have made the decision that go to the better school. In the grade one of university, I challege myself and contact many new things. I always have a thought that I’m satisfied of what I have, so that I’m not willing to do extra things any more.

  In the grade two of university, I find I’m last of classmates. In that time, I know I give up my decision. Difficult is always a barrier makes me afraid to try again. Taking part in the competion, the compion doubt my capacity. I know I can’t change everything, but I can choose negect this and do myself. Sometimes, a optimistic attitude will creat beautiful life.

  My life is green at less I think. A small sun in my heart that I can see the sunlight everyday. I want to say university has taught me a lot. I learn how to be strong, how to be excellent and how to be happy. N ow, I have many friends, they help me and we share happiness and sorrow. University life is not as worse as I image. Everyday, the first thing I tell myself is smile. I love my life because it likes water which we need even though don’t have any taste.

  There are always another mountain, always I want to move high. Life is long, one thing you should do is create your life. Drawing one color on your paintting, you will find the colorful of the world.