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A Thank-you letter to my father

发布时间：2012-12-18 14:20:12 作者：阚小玲  发布者：0901401040 浏览次数：20090  类别：中文作文   优秀指数：★

A Thank-you letter to my father

Dear father:

  How time flies,the tanks-giving day is on it’s way . for so many years I’ve been seekig a way to express my heartfelt thanks for all you have done for me. Here comes it!

  When I was a litter girl,you always tell me that every one should remember other’s  kindness and give the person who need help as much as I can.Therefores I ,under your influence,do my better to be a kind girl.So,thank you for your education,whithout it I would not have so many good friends. You always inspire me not only  by words, but also by what you have done! Your efforts in the work, your loyalty to your friends, your responsibility for the family and your persistence in the life have already set me good examples in my own life.

 

  Then,as the time goes by,I begain to living in school.At that time,I can went back home only one times a week.I always could fond your figure after school.And sometimes ,you had been waiting for me for several hours.

  Now,I am a student who will entre into socity several months letter.I am worry about my future very much.You ,under this situation ,often tell me that not everything is going smoothly.In some ways,you are not only my teacher but also my friend,I am very happy that you can listen to the voice of my heart. 　Thank you for always being there sharing my life when I need you most. Whenever I encounter difficulties, I never feel alone and vulnerable, because you will keep me on the right path. I’m blessed to have you

     I am very sorry that I can not accompany you and mom at home this thangs-giving day.So,I hope  my thanks to you by this letter.

My father, I love you and I will love you forever!

　　Yours beloved

　　

 

 

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  A Thank-you letter to my father

  Dear father: ,

    How time flies,the tanks-giving Thanksgiving Day is on it’s its way . for For so many years I’ve been seekig a way to express my heartfelt thanks for all you have done for me. Here comes it!

    When I was a litter little girl,you always tell told me that every one should remember other’s  kindness and give the person who need help as much as I can.Therefores I ,under your influence,do my better to be a kind girl.Therefore, I do my best to be a kind girl with your influence. So,thank you for your education,whithout without it I would not have so many good friends. You always inspire me not only  by words, but also by what you have done! Your efforts in the work, your loyalty to your friends, your responsibility for the family and your persistence in the life have already set me good examples in my own life.

   

    Then,as the time goes by, as time goes on,I begain began to living in school.live on campus. At that time,I can went go back home only one times once a week.I always could fond find your figure after school.And sometimes ,you had been waiting for me for several hours.

    Now,I am a student who will entre enter into socity society several months letter later.I am worry about my future very much.You ,under this situation ,often tell me that not everything is going smoothly.In some ways,you are not only my teacher but also my friend,I am very happy that you can listen to the voice of my heart. 　Thank you for always being there sharing my life when I need you most. Whenever I encounter difficulties, I never feel alone and vulnerable, because you will keep me on the right path. I’m blessed to have you

       I am very sorry that I can not accompany you and mom at home this thangs-giving day.So,I hope  my thanks to you by this letter.

  My father, I love you and I will love you forever!

  　　Yours beloved

  　　

   

   

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  A Thank-you letter to my father

  Dear father:

    How time flies,（“时间飞逝”，固定句，用感叹号）the tanks-giving day （单词拼写错误，Thanksgiving Day）is on it’s way . for so many years I’ve been seekig a way to express my heartfelt thanks for all you have done for me. Here comes it!

    When I was a litter （单词拼写错误，little）girl,you always tell me that every one should remember other’s  kindness and give the person who need help as much as I （改为you）can.Therefores I ,under your influence,do my better （do one's best,“尽某人所能”，固定词组）to be a kind girl.So,thank you for your education,whithout it I would not have so many good friends. You always inspire me not only  by words, but also by what you have done! Your efforts in the work, your loyalty to your friends, your responsibility for the family and your persistence in the life have already set me good examples （调整顺序，good examples for me）in my own life.

   

    Then,as the time goes by,I begain to living （动词不定式，用live）in school.At that time,I can went back home only one times （英语中表示“一次”用once）a week.（前后文时态要一致）I always could fond （情态动词后用原形find，另外find过去式为found）your figure （这个词太大了，指的是电影、文学作品中的人物形象）after school.And sometimes ,you had been waiting for me for several hours.

    Now,I am a student who will entre into socity several months letter.I am worry about my future very much.You ,under this situation ,often tell me that not everything is going smoothly.In some ways,you are not only my teacher but also my friend,I am very happy that you can listen to the voice of my heart. 　Thank you for always being there sharing my life when I need you most. Whenever I encounter difficulties, I never feel alone and vulnerable, because you will keep me on the right path. I’m blessed to have you

       I am very sorry that I can not accompany ^with （固定词组）you and mom at home ^on （具体到某一天用on）this thangs-giving day.（Thanksgiving Day)So,I hope  my thanks to (will reach）you by this letter.

  My father, I love you and I will love you forever!

  　　Yours beloved

  　　

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