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Entertaining movies

发布时间：2012-12-21 21:49:07 作者：曾小莉  发布者：selina8183 浏览次数：3461  类别：英文作文  

In today’s society , entertaining movies tend to be more popular with many people ,especially the young, why does this happen ? different people have different reasons ,it seems that one of the most common reasons is that they simply want to relax and be entertained .,also movies make them escape from the real world ,besides ,seeing entertaining movies would build  up friendship .

As everybody knows that most of people have been pushed to work in order to support their families ,especially in big cities like Shanghai ,Beijing and Shenzhen, after a week of hard work ,relaxing is a necessity ,watching entertaining movies would be the best venue for leisure,

What is more ,Most of us ,regardless of a student ,a doctor or even the manager ,more or less have their own problems ,there are many different ways to escape them ,such as reading a book, gong out for a walk ,but what in my mind is that entertaining movies would be the best ,because there are many plot lines which can make people laugh in these movies , when you are completely captivated into this kind of movies ,all of the troubles would go out of their mind .then you would have a good mood state ,

       One more important view we must mention is that people hardly going to the movie theater alone ,they will go with their family members or friends ,they will talk with each other or discuss something interesting with their friends, which would make the friendship between them strong ,if your classmates whose home is a long distance away from your school, then seeing entertainment movies is one of the best choice to go around .

       In a word ,there’re many advantages of seeing entertaining movies ,not only do the movies make people laugh ,but also improve the friendship and forget all of the problems go away for a while .

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  In today’s society , entertaining movies tend to be more popular with (改为among，意为“在人群中”）many people ,especially the young, （标点错误，用句号）why does this happen ? different people have different reasons ,it seems that one of the most common reasons is that they simply want to relax and be entertained .,also movies （调整顺序，movies also）make them escape ^away （固定词组）from the real world ,besides ,seeing （watching movies,固定搭配）entertaining movies would （时态问题，用一般将来时）build  up friendship .

  As everybody knows that most of people have been pushed to（改为into） work in order to support their families ,especially in big cities like Shanghai ,Beijing and Shenzhen, after a week of hard work ,relaxing is a necessity ,watching entertaining movies would be the best venue for leisure,

  What is more ,Most of us ,regardless of a student ,a doctor or even the manager ,more or less have their own problems ,there are many different ways to escape （用词重复，用fleed）them ,such as reading a book, gong （going）out for a walk ,but what in my mind is that entertaining movies would be the best ,because there are many plot lines which can make people laugh in these movies , when you are completely captivated into this kind of movies ,all of the troubles would go out of their （注意人称）mind .then you would have a good mood state ,

         One more important view we must mention is that people hardly going （一般现在时态，go）to the movie theater alone ,they will go with their family members or friends ,they will talk with each other or discuss something interesting with their friends, which would make the friendship between them strong （用词不当）,if your classmates whose home is （先行词为复数）a long distance away from your school, then seeing entertainment movies is one of the best choice （one of加****级为固定搭配，意为“最......之一”，choice用复数，加s）to go around .

         In a word ,there’re many advantages of seeing entertaining movies ,not only do the movies make people laugh ,but also improve the friendship and forget all of the problems go away for a while .

  总评：时态混乱，标点符号意识薄弱，词语搭配问题很多。